by BeanE4you
Also, a female Dominant is called a Mistress, not a Master.
...but I might have if it hadn't been such a gramatical abortion. You should seriously consider having someone proof and edit your stories before you even think about posting them. This poorly written thing might have been good enough to rate a 4 or even 5, but as is, I give it a 2 at best.
Needs an editor. I wasn't sure why she'd turn over her earnings to a stepmother. Perhaps English isn't your first language?
god how bad was this..MASTER yea right....stop writing...it hurts to read this dribble
for one thing a father and daughter should not do that to each other, and another thing the step-mother should not have forced her step-daughter into having sex with her, and also forced her to call her step-mother, master, the only good thing about this story is that it is only 1 page and no other parts
I loved the premise, but as both participants in the "slavery arrangement" are female, her owner would likely be addressed as "Mistress" not "Master", a "mistress" is a feminine master in the category of slavery- which is the general "atmosphere" going on here.
LOVED the story, especially how her stepmom enslaved her, and I beg you for more of this and/or like this, as this's one of my personal favorite genres going on here- it was oodles of fun to read, especially about how her stepmom enslaved her and dominated her... fun to read, but horrible in the real world: the idea of a mom of any type enslaving her own daughter- that's the horrible thing, but as far as *drama* goes: it's outstandingly perfect!
Sincerely delighted by the *story*, and begging for more of it/like it, ASAP;
Nurek, one of your hopefully many fans.
And they lived happily ever after.
Wish I could be a slave to both of you!
Bottoms up
spankmeagin