All Comments on 'Our Own Kind Of Lost'

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live4passionlive4passionover 13 years ago
hauntingly etched

some truly amazing lines

vrosej10vrosej10over 13 years ago
This is one of your better poems.

Good solid imagery which is engaging enough to take the reader on a ride. Nice.

fridayamfridayamover 13 years ago
I liked this

There are some really memorable lines, especially lines 4 and 5 of stanza 2. I felt you could sharpen a few other lines but it is a good read. Ty

LadyGenevieveLadyGenevieveover 13 years ago

Intriguing, and so well composed. Personally, I so enjoy this nature of style that invites interpretation and whets the imagination.

greenmountaineergreenmountaineerover 13 years ago

Nicely written, except for the frequent line breaks. Maybe it's just me, but when I read it with imagined line breaks fewer in number and with certain line ending words, it flowed for me better.

"spotlit bruise" great juxtaposition

"...ablaze with shadows" confusing to me.

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