by Powerone
Where do I enroll? My panties are wet just from pondering such a scenario.
Mmmmmmmmmmmm Oh My Where do I go to enroll ???? what a sexy horney story wish I was Rebecca I am soooooooooo delicously wetn just reading it Hmmmmmmmmmmmmm MORE MORE PLEASE:)
I've read a hell of alot of stories and by far yours are some of the best I've read. Consistently you come up with great stories and hot climaxes. Keep it up dude, Cheers!
I need a brutal fuck just like that sometimes, leaves my panties wet just thinking about it. School principal fantasy is just so awesome. Never got even close to it in real life though. Thanks Powerone.
if there is a school out here like this, please let me know!! my god. one of the bestt.
The idea was interesting.... But the way the story was written, In my own opinion, Was rather stale and boring. Everything that was said was so un-believeable... It seemed fake; Like a cheap porno put into word. Not to mention the over use of words... Eh. I give it a 25
The dialogue was way too stilted. I've never heard anyone communicate with each other the way you had these two characters communicate, as if they were incapable of having a thought without expressing it. Keep working at it, though! :D Four stars.
I can't believe the comments on this awful piece. Did any of you actually read this or where you so busy working your wangs that the terrible writing didn't bother you?
Pathetic use of vocabulary, unbelievable premise. I agree with the only two sensible people here: It comes off like a cheap porno. Poor premise, poor execution and poor ending.
The author needs to learn how to write. Then again, what can we expect when the author writes with one hand down his/her pants.
Just FYI I don't know if "eighteen" is code for some much younger age, but the average woman stops growing just after she goes through puberty. So the typical eighteen year old's body is no longer developing and hasn't been for a few years...so this doesn't really make sense? Unless you mean "mature" as in "aged and wrinkled" or something equally bizarre.
But it's generally good to know what women and their bodies are like if you want to write good erotica that appeals to readers, and this point is a pretty basic one.
She was a lovely young vergin, in every sense of the word, stripped of both her modesty and her defiance, and with any luck, she will come to embrace her new passion.
No way does a girl after two slaps give up like that and allow someone to rape her, especially anal.
And what is up with calling it 'the pleasure' and 'the pain'? It sounds awkward, it would have sounded more natural to say just 'pleasure' and 'pain'. Is English not your first language because that was odd.
Weirdest thing though is you saying an 18year old has the body of a 'mature woman'. What is that supposed to mean? At 18 most women's bodies are fully developed? Unless you meant she was aged looking? Which, again, would just be odd.
There is more to even erotic stories than just sex, you can end up distracting the reader from the scene you are trying to set with poor quality phrases and descriptions.
I found the grammatical errors a bit distracting, and the dialogue unrealistic.
Umm... This is fucked up no women or girl would just let them selfs be raped
no lube dude it was bone dry
i know it was anal sadism but she was virginal the least he could have used spit /precum/her pussy juice for his cock or her anus
rest it was hot how the stepfather has eyes on her holes and is gonna use her as fucktoy behind her mothers back