by 1sickbastard
Great start... looking forward to more! I especially loved the dirty talk. Well done.
This installment was intended as a first chapter. The second chapter in the process of being edited. Third chapter in being written.
I would love to have more comments. I'm still a novice at writting. Any input helps.
She could've confronted them, and enjoyed double the pleasure.
Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
You have to write more chapters, this is your first writing? You're on your way! Keep up the great work, I'll be waiting for the next installment.
I was a pretty good start. Just do yourself a favor and double check your grammar and some of your 'you's'. I can see the direction this might go and I want to see where you want this to go. Don't rush your story cause I can see you getting better with each chapter written. Good first try!!!
I approve this story :)...although, dang it, I missed at least one faulty "you". Grrrr!
Just check your grammar and vocabulary ("discrete" means apart or detached from others; separate; distinct. "Discreet" means showing prudence and circumspection; decorous.) There are several good online dictionaries with instant lookup. And work on the revenge--it should be inventive and sexy.
I hope that she has her revenge. She sounds like she will be even hotter once she takes a lover.
Perhaps the son can help her in getting what she wants.
Thanks for the good read.
Love this story!!! It's very graphic and just perfect. I came so hard i nearly passed out. Please dont stop...
This is hot. You put so much into it my panties are wet. How long do I have to wait for chapter 2?
Great premise.
I especially loved how the father & daughter were talking dirty to each other.
If I could offer one piece of story feedback, it would be more dialogue.
I'm excited to read the next chaper. Thanks.
Wouldn't it be great for him to do both plus if he needs a rest watching them eat each other's pussy will get him hard again real fast. Both wife and daughter love cum so let them eat it out of each other's pussy. What could ever top that? Go for it,pull out all stops.
I hope that the flashlight Sheryl used in the car was one of those long, thick, aluminum types, holding four D-cells! Woo! Woo! As to the father referring to his daughter, and the daughter referring to herself, with the words cunt, nasty, slut, and fuck toy, I've never understood the desire for domination or for verbal degradation, or why a women, even a young and dumb one, would put up with it. Doesn't seem much like love to me. But then much that is sexual for many people isn't about love and affection. It's about control or submission to control. But that's just how I see it. Other than that, I am looking foward to what the mother's revenge will be.
I enjoyed your story and could easily place myself there as either female character (though I liked the "role" of the twenty-something!). I only wish you had a little more dialogue!
~Eve
entrance to the uterus is the size of a pin and there's no way he could slip past her cervix further into her deepest "pouch" unless she were in labor?
The 'pouch' to which I was refering is the 'posterior fornix'.
This is the deepest part of the vaginal canal. This structure, alonge with the 'anterior fornix' are the pouches of the vaginal canal, and are adjacent to the cervix.
That while I voted a 5, I failed to comment on this super hot story. Hope the rest of this sickbastard's stories are as good as this first one. It's a tonic for all sick bastards-but no cure.
to see what Sheryl has planned for Bill... and possibly for Tiffany! Was there a somewhat gentle inferrence of Bill being a Dom? The language/bedroom-speak and fuck-scene almost played out as a Dom/submissive role play.
Very well done!
I would have stuck my 14 I'm cock in all your holes n made you suck my cock dry baby you don't even know I would ate your asshole out while fucking you wit a dildo wit you chocking on that fat cock
That's what she gets for driving a Prius. I bet that horse like cock was fucking into her steaming lungs!
I WISH I WAS THERE WITH A VIDEO CAMERA FILMED IT NAKED AND HOPEFULLY SHE HAS PLENTY OF TOYS TO BE USE IN ALL HOLES.
The atitude of the mother toward the relationship between the father/husband and daughter was unreasonable. She clearly recognies that they love each other. She is only concerned with herself and her well being. She gave permission for her husband to have an affair. She recognizes the bond between her husband and their daughter and fears she may be replaced. Her througths perfectly describes her lack of sense of self, her insecure/fragile ego and her latent self-doubt as a sexual equal to her huband/mate.