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vrosej10 over 13 years ago

You've got a boner for moonlight ain't you? :)

Doesn't quite make it as a haiku technically (two images need to have a disconnect, one can't be the result of the other) but it works for me as a short poem of free form. It's so close to a lune that I am almost sorry you didn't hit that by one word....

twelveoone over 13 years ago

she does have a point, lacks ambiguity

waning moonlight

your breast traces

my fingers

play connect the dots