All Comments on 'Quiet, Secluded No-Tell Motel'

I liked the story, the feelings of nervousness, excitement, pleasure and so on all combined to make the character feel real. But I hated the way you interchanged "Melissa" with "The girl." It abstracted her into something that wasn't part of the story - in fact it felt like you didn't know how to refer to her. If you get an editor, your stories will be greatly improved. Keep writing, practice makes perfect!

regards

Had to write a comment after reading this great story, and after reading the last comment.

This was very erotic, a very hot story, and loved the way you twisted and turned around and superb ending. I nutted halfway through, then went back tonight and wow, nutted again! That says something.

Now, for my pet peeve. Why do people nit pick all the time. This is an erotic site, and that's what I'm looking for. Hot stories, hot situations, unusual happenings....something not in the ordinary. Having said that, I loved this and didn't even notice the item about her name and the girl...I guess you could have just said Melissa this, Melissa that, but that would have been awful.

Anyway, thanks for writing. Great, wonderful job.