Tom and Jerry? I think I saw that cartoon. Are they the best names you could think of? I'd almost lost interest by then anyway so I just skipped through the rest of it.
A good start, and an interesting choice as a female writer, writing from a man's point of view. I find it almost impossible to write from a woman's POV.
Since you set this story at a resort you might like my story
by Abdulbenthere© Literotica.com Romance
I also noted in your biography page your location in Louisiana: You might enjoy my Carter brothers series set in New Orleans. You can find them at
QB Murdered Cheerleader Missing A New Orleans lovers' lane legend: The Carter brothers.
Lair of the Carter Brothers Vampires keep Katie alive to feed on her.
Bruce's Last Night A Carter brothers' victim developed a lust for blood.
Molly Meets the Baron A woman who survived a vampire's bite meets a Voudoo god.
Mage and Spirit What Happened Between Lucius and Elizabeth in 1928?
Mating with the Priestess The coven watches as Lucius takes Astrid.
Priestess-Bride and the Spirit I've never undressed in front of a dead nun before.
Katie After the Prom Carter brothers victim wants a normal life.
Elizabeth's Vampire Story Elizabeth was ten years old when she was bitten.
Katie Joins the Sisterhood Vampires' victim learns the mysteries of Astrid's coven.
Mage and The Bad Men "He has a special tool to use on naughty women."
Sister Liz and the Werewolf A man becomes a wolf by giving himself over to Satan.
Sorry to write so much, I just like to communicate with other writers.
Did you mean Polka Dot, or is poke-a-dot some sort of new game, lol?
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