All Comments on 'At The lake'

I loved this story i could picture everything even I had an orgasim iv never had before just by reading this. =D

Not a single worthy piece of fiction was EVER, EVER written in the first person present tense.

If I'm reading about something, it happened in the past. Further, it assumes an intimacy with the reader; involving me involuntarily, that is simply unacceptable.

Gracious me! What a weak storyline, peppered with inuendo but failing to satisfy any avid Femme Domme reader, culminating in only two negative comments!

i for one happen to LOVE first person accounts!!

huggs

suzanne

It's second person, not first person. That's pretty rare.

It's second person.

Loved the story and style. just keep it up. More, please. I come here to read erotic lit and this definitely qualifies. Should have a section in responses for the English profs to give grades on writing, and the rest of us can enjoy and comment in the content.

Good story. The way it was written worked well. The setting of a church picnic with kids, etc was naughty. The humiliation of Bill was complete and cruel. The sex was hot, nasty, and raw. I liked it.