All Comments on 'An Alba for Him'

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AngelineAngelineabout 13 years ago
Lovely!

Sweet and a really clear precise image. Works well!

GuiltyPleasureGuiltyPleasureabout 13 years ago
Once again.....

....my comment disappeared. I love short poems that say a lot as this one does. Suffice to say - I give it five.

Tess

EroticOrogenyEroticOrogenyabout 13 years ago
nice little poem

succinct expression of moment.

Had to look up 'alba'

LiarLiarabout 13 years ago
Tried looking up "alba"

Found many different definition, none that I can see how they make sense here. So I still don't know what it means in this context.

Doesn't take away much from this poem though. A vivid snapshot of everyday beauty, with just the right details highlighted to turn it, in my opinion, from prosaic to poetic.

I'm not too cracy about the spacing thing around "slowly". I see what you're going for, but it doesn't need it. It's a world that carries that connotation just fine on it's own. It doesn't need a formatting gimmick for empasis.

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