All Comments on 'The Disappearance'

little more flesh on the bones, little more mystery, something...too pat.

100 BTW

I was delighted (regular, not Turkish) after the third line, and thought I had an interrsting read ahead of me. A perfect detail to highlight a highlight of a relationship. The epitome of showing istead of telling.

then the poem detonated; but it didn't 'end'

sorry, had to ;)

Seriously though, the rest reads like a journal entry, or a grocery list. Telling, not showing, and not letting me the reader in. A real missed opportunity with that great start.