All Comments on 'Blackmailing Becca Ch. 01'

I have a suggestion. While you're in your office - the outhouse - take chapter 2 and throw it down in the hole. Then hitch up "them overalls," go back to the "still," and do what you do best - hide from society!

You are a PIG!

"... Chatted the girl, while finding it hard to believe that the old man had put in such a small effort. ..."

I can't believe that, as a would be author, YOU put such a small effort into spelling, grammar, punctuation, etc.

Even the most perfunctory proof-reading should have shown you numerous errors requiring correction.

Either get a literate friend, or a decent Editor, to go through any future stories and edit out the crap!

I'm really unsure what people expect from a NC/R story besides some not quite kosher sex in respect to consent. I thought it was not bad, but you definitely need some editing because the grammatical errors hurt the flow of the story. Good luck!

certainly keep going, noone cares about grammar in porn. I think her ass needs to be taken by the farmer and later maybe she can be shared with his other farmers

Like most of the commentators on your story, I found the incredible number of spelling and grammatical errors to be quite distracting. While I don't think you need to through your other stories down the hole in the outhouse, I do think you need to make use of the countless available proofreaders. The story is pretty good but it is really hard to get through it!

i enjoyed the story premise was good and you managed the story well enough. maybe some more depth in the story telling would enhance the effect of the situations Becca finds herself in, but other than that great job editing wasn't too bad still didn't detract from the overall story great work hope you continue

i didn't think the grammar was so bad that it was distracting.

Shouldn't your references to college all be university? College is more a US term not UK.

Either place has editors please use one.

one of the few times I post negative things in the public

A man should have respect for himself to keep clean.

I do not like to see anyone forced into anything, but forced sex is rape and that is among the worst of all. Rape like child molestation takes something from the person that is utterly irreplaceable

The story was good, but i cannot help notice some guy complaining about the rape, erm it is a non consent and reluctance section, its kind of what it is all about, if you do not like this kind of stuff then do not read it!

dirty

It would have been nice to see Becca more seduced and maybe return the favor?