All Comments on 'Enough Reason for a Horse'

little verse, sweetie. A little description of a slice of life. A blue slice later to be pink, hopefully---and hopefully dry with no Australian flooding!

I feel a bit rude

laughing out loud

then I remembered

you can't hear me

This made my morning

Thank you for posting!

Reminds me when an ex of mine threw herself down the stairs when half asleep and the next two weeks she spent explaining to everyone it wasn't me.

Only a small point, the first line gives the impression she has a choice about wearing the contusion, when she hasn't. Choice softens the embarrassment potential.

100

very nicely done alliteration

in that 'marching down the aisle' and wearing her bruise out in the open.

agree about the nice use of allit, but was 'though' meant to be 'through', sound-linking with 'bruise' and 'blue'?

Nicely done! Chipbutty's idea is pretty good - "through" would add to the internal rhyme.

A sensitive and humourous poem.

Tess + 5

You do this over and over: so much story in so few words. It's balanced and the images are vivid and active (which also gives the poem a lively pace so clear I can almost hear it). I'd put a comma after "corsage" to clarify that the bride is the one marching (though technically the bruise/corsage is with her, but you know what I mean lol). Wonderful stuff, Vee.

Oh well, I didn't say much. Just that it was an attention-grabber of a title, and that the poen was very nice too.

you are so good at original ideas for poems well done