I've never commented on a story before. I wanted to like your story but I couldn't force myself to read it all. Way too many typos....using he for her repeatedly....really needs to be proofread before submitting.
This was actually pointed out by a friend, but not untill after the story was submitted. I'm going to try and re-submit a corrected version... though I sincerely hope that your idea of sexuality does not always involve perfect grammar.
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Anonymous02/02/11
+1 on the typos
All in all, yes, a good story and would like to see more. But lines such as
"as the first massive stream of cum blasted into his lip"
I got lost enough in the detail that overlooking a typo or two was easy...
I always look forward to your submissions, you never fail to deliver great cock sucking and facial fantasies!
I'm working on fixing this... but honestly who can read "as the first massive stream of cum blasted into his lip" and do anything but chuckle and the error.
I suppose if you're a massive homophobe you might be bothered by it, but then again if you're that kind of uptight person, you should probably be on your church group website, not literotica!
I saw your story the day it was posted. As a big fan of your writing and stories about fellatio, I gave you a rating of five and wished it could've been more. I can overlook the typos because the story was still a great read for me. Thanks for writing, GML, and I hope to read more soon. RCG
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Anonymous02/12/11
Incredibly hot!
I love everything about this, from his masturbatory fantasies to her control of his orgasm!
what a very hot horny story Lucia the teacher . brilliant writing awesome very hot erotic story . reading this only got more of a turn on .do keep them cumming
English
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I've never commented on a story before. I wanted to like your story but I couldn't force myself to read it all. Way too many typos....using he for her repeatedly....really needs to be proofread before submitting.
Thanks
This was actually pointed out by a friend, but not untill after the story was submitted. I'm going to try and re-submit a corrected version... though I sincerely hope that your idea of sexuality does not always involve perfect grammar.
+1 on the typos
All in all, yes, a good story and would like to see more. But lines such as
"as the first massive stream of cum blasted into his lip"
tend to off-put us sometimes.
Once again, a very good story...
I got lost enough in the detail that overlooking a typo or two was easy...
I always look forward to your submissions, you never fail to deliver great cock sucking and facial fantasies!
Typo's?
I was so tied up with the story - typo's were the last thing on my mind. Good job.
Typoes
I'm working on fixing this... but honestly who can read "as the first massive stream of cum blasted into his lip" and do anything but chuckle and the error.
I suppose if you're a massive homophobe you might be bothered by it, but then again if you're that kind of uptight person, you should probably be on your church group website, not literotica!
Awesome!
Thanks for another great story!
Great Story
I saw your story the day it was posted. As a big fan of your writing and stories about fellatio, I gave you a rating of five and wished it could've been more. I can overlook the typos because the story was still a great read for me. Thanks for writing, GML, and I hope to read more soon. RCG
Incredibly hot!
I love everything about this, from his masturbatory fantasies to her control of his orgasm!
Longshot8ft
Deliciously hot
Thank you
taking his big load of cum over your face
what a very hot horny story Lucia the teacher . brilliant writing awesome very hot erotic story . reading this only got more of a turn on .do keep them cumming
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