All Comments on 'Car Wash'

For a story to be enjoyable it needs to be believable.

"I stop by your ..."

That's it!

I read no more.

Since I KNOW that I did not take part, creating a story that seeks to make me a participant is totally unbelievable.

Therefore I have zero interest in it.

You could have spent years writing it but to me it's not worth bothering with.

I'm not a fan of 2nd person either, but I don't let stylistic preference ruin a good read. If Jim Croce had been employed inyour car wash, he would have had a whole different opinion of those working inthe car wash blues.

An erotic tale by a person who loved what they were doing.

Don't care whether the raconteuse was a 'first'.'second' or whatever person.

You come out as a lover who has little regard for silly privacy customs.

Liked it!

Short and playfully hot, I found it very believable. I hope you post again.