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by h3lls_sweety

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago

The plot was good, but the grammatical errors and the shift from past to present tense were really distracting. Try keeping your narrative in past tense and watch for run-on sentences. I think you definitely have potential. :)

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