by greenmountaineer
i enjoyed the write, if not the demise of the fly :) the final strophe pulled this beery otherness all together for me.
......dopey winter fly has watery end. I like how you've built a poem around such a small incident and widened the lens to include so much else - skillful.
Tess.
and I gave it a five though I suspect it'd work as well, perhaps better, if the strophes were lighter, less packed with info. I mean it is just a fly right, though the point about your failed poem being a fitting last resting place for it made me grin. ----> :D (see?)
A nice telling of one of those weird little incidents that make up life. Good move not trying to rationalise your action.