All Comments on 'The House Fly'

by greenmountaineer

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buttersbuttersabout 13 years ago
different...

i enjoyed the write, if not the demise of the fly :) the final strophe pulled this beery otherness all together for me.

GuiltyPleasureGuiltyPleasureabout 13 years ago
Much ado.....

......dopey winter fly has watery end. I like how you've built a poem around such a small incident and widened the lens to include so much else - skillful.

Tess.

AngelineAngelineabout 13 years ago
Pretty funny

and I gave it a five though I suspect it'd work as well, perhaps better, if the strophes were lighter, less packed with info. I mean it is just a fly right, though the point about your failed poem being a fitting last resting place for it made me grin. ----> :D (see?)

vrosej10vrosej10about 13 years ago
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A nice telling of one of those weird little incidents that make up life. Good move not trying to rationalise your action.

Maria2394Maria2394about 13 years ago
enjoyed

your poem very much. :)

~ maria

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