nice twist, but otherwise too straight though
I liked this, saw the situation, knew the characters. A good short novel compressed into a few lines. Lovely.
that is so sad but I do find the second stanza to be more prose than the first
First stanza was the best part for me.....second stanza I felt didn't really fit with the first stanza......
.......these "slice of life" poems so well. Lovely images.
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