by chitrashi
You spent too much time in describing the scenery and not enough on the sex. The last two episodes of sex would've been nicer if you'd gone into details.
It seems you need help with Literotica plot development.
You are a very earnest writer. I can feel the emotion you are going through as you play these stories in your mind. I can read a dozen stories on the Lit and feel nothing for the characters, but not yours. Yet... There is a big difference between degradation and submission, and as long as you understand that difference, it's OK to go there. But alas, I don't think you do.
As for the previous comments, I couldn't disagree more. Of course there should be sex scenes, but it's the emotion that matters, not the action. That's your strong suit, and you need to develop it. People who need action have weak minds. Don't pander to them, or it will just weaken you.