All Comments on 'Carrion'

Just a judgment call:

Consider new sentence here

and squirms. Too bad

ambivalent about the 2nd sentence

5

to describe the awful and open up the ineffable. Beautifuilly compressed.

I wouldn't change the squirms line. I think there's a real referent there (maggots, for example) but it also works well with the overall image you are conveying. The whole poem does because it's short and vivid and precise.

.....Anonymous! Seething with images and well chosen words.

Tess

I like this one. Not sure about the cawing either. I am in the process of writng something similar. Death and pregnancy are recurrent themes with me, so this one is a hit with me.

My, my. It sounds a bit like revenge. lol

I'd say no changes what so ever are necessary.. very well expressed.

Sincerely,

Jes_da_man

are words enough for a tome, TK U MLJ LV NV