All Comments on ''Accidental' Sleepover'

Great

i know its a made up story but dont make it soooo easy to tell

Even if it is 20-30 years. Trust me.,

I wrote a story about that, too - 'Full Circle'. Check it out, if you're so inclined. . .

This is a fairly common theme. It was well told, but I though it could have stood out more with a little more detail about the group. In this case, more dialog would have been in order, and a little more back story on Jon and Ellen. I think an increase in these two elements would make this story stand out among the others of this genre theme.

Believe it or not, Ellen, a very sensual and 'stacked' young lady and I came together on a set up date (even though we'd known each other for years). The attraction was immediate and we were soon sharing what you describe in your story. Excellent! - Great memory!

It has a sweetness most stories here don't have.

Makes it warmer and more lovable.

All joy,

King Cuddle

FAIR WARNING: I am about to tell you a Truthful and Honest accounting of my Real Life First Copulative Experience. Not for the weak minded trolls and annoymousies who lack Real Life Experience with the female persuasion and who haven't the intellectual capacity to understand the concept of what separates Reality from Fiction.

I wish that I could brag about my first time going all the way with a female of the opposing gender but honesty and garbled memories whipsawed between beer and pot have left me with cringeworthy flashes of mutual failure. It was a High School party celebrating some irrelevant sporting event or another. Hell, I don't remember ever dating the girl. I don't think I even learned her name? All that I can remember now five decades later just that she was a naked female.

We were both so embarrassed but also em-bare-assed afterwards by cruel, cruel, heartless fiends for ex-friends laughing at our pathetically ignorant, humiliating failure to accomplish anything more then a reputation for how-not-to-lose-your-virginty.

I was so traumatized it would be a couple of years later, after several attempts with different women, before I could finally achieve an ejaculation into a vagina. I would not be surprised if during that period my fumbling amateur status convinced at least a couple of my dates to seriously consider joining a nunnery.

Sworn & Attested to a half-century later by - fanfare -

Loved it, although your first-time stamina is a bit hard to believe. Caring characters who look after each other, always nice IMHO

was a good read, but,could have been better if you had some oral sex in there before they jumped each others bones.

Don't listen to the other comment about what SHOULD have happened. That's their fantasy, not your story. The way they moved right to it is perfectly in keeping with the excitement the characters were feeling during their first time, particularly for Ellen having a fantasy come true, all sense of pacing oneself would fly out the window in an inexperienced lover.

Well done. Perfectly written. Don't change a thing.

Perfect as it is

Just the kind of situation I have fantasized many times! My pussy is so wet reading this. Thanks!

Make your story's happy ending ,much better to read

Mostly people wanting another chapter is because they identified with characters and didn’t want to say goodbye. I felt that way with this story.

To me that means even in a relatively short tale you dragged me totally into your story. Great job! 5 stars.

Bill S.