All Comments on 'Black Vampire Goddess'

This story is missing something.it lacks a certain vibe that usually comes when reading writings in this genre.Its not just the length but the content.The beginning 2 paragraphs were promising but then it degenerated to the kind of thing we often see on this site ie wham-bang-thanks-everybody-and-goodbye sex scenes.

If you really want to make an impact on this site especially in this genre you need to flesh out our story.A good place to start would have been to expound on the ancient vampire thing and also the details of meeting the wolf man.That,interspersed with steamy scenes would have been much better.Sadly i have to rate this a 2 but feel free to shame me and write an awesome new piece LOL!!!!