All Comments on 'Virgin Tease'

Yes the spelling and wording aren't that great, but I like the story line and it made me really horny. Just keep writing and use spell-check next time!!!

You will get beat on because of no spell check. Most of the better authors here have 1 or more of the volunteer editors help clean things up for them and make sure they use the right form of to, two, or too. Having said that as a publisher and writer myself, I can see lots of promise in your writing.

Let your characters expand, do not be afraid of getting into 2 or more pages as many of us here enjoy a story that leads us down the path before the raw humping and pumping.

Let the characters guide you where THEY want to go and your writing will get even better.

I will look forward to more from you so keep it up!

To commenters: EASE UP on the chick, it is her first story!

Consider how much you paid for it. If you don't like what you get on a FREE page go spend your money on a book. Besides, it's hard to spell correctly when she's got one hand in her panties playing with her clit! (And if you can't get the picture of a 19-year-old with triple D's masturbating while she types into your head, you really need to get a life!)

Now to trippleDandkinky : Not bad for a first try, you do need to run your spelling check, but still a decent sex scene for someone who hasn't had sex yet (assuming you were NOT lying in your bio).

As to the idiots who comment, you can go to the control page and delete them. Personally, i wonder about the editors of Literotica: When I submitted WHAT THE CAB DRIVER SAW (http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=350416) they rejected it because I left out the "h" in "spaghetti strap." Check out some of my stories: My first submission was

Her Parents Were Not Home, (http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=275274), and I wish you an experience as happy as that one was for the young woman I wrote about in that story.

Abdul

I thought it was enjoyable, very sexy with good hot description. Clearly you have talent and I hope you continue to write

Yes, the spelling .. and no real comment on 'safe sex' ..

But, keep writing ..

Terrible writing but great story. Keep up the effort :)

i think this story is very lovely and full of romance. this is the best storys i have read in a very long time. keep up the good work. i have enjoyed your story so much!!!

I'm curious how the girl is a virgin and uses a dildo that too hard.. it defeats the whole purpose of being a virgin

KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK..I JUST LOVED IT (AS A FIRST TIMER NO-ONE

WILL HOLD YOU ACCOUNTABLE FOR A FEW SPELLING ERRORS..AS FAR

AS ABDUL GOES THE TWO STORIES THAT HE SAID HE PUBLISHED

(HYPERLINK COPY & PASTE BELOW --COULD NOT BE FOUND AT LITEROTIC)

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