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The Mystic Adventure Ch. 05

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by Anonymous

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by r_d_txn03/22/11

Awesome

Great series, great finish, deff one of the best

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by Anonymous03/22/11

Great series!

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by rflikeslit03/22/11

Great Story

awesome job, well balanced tale sailing sex sun and sea , look forward to your next submissions

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by Anonymous03/23/11

....KIM & KELLY are HOT and READY !!,,,,,,

.... good writing, you have taken those open minded women ready for their new jobs, so you can write some stories now that Kim and Kelly are the beach bar's erotic masseuses at the Hilton's nude resort in Cancun..they are popular and average 18 half hour "sessions" per day and they are live on the internet 24/7..the resort has to build bleachers for the loud drunk audiences...next month is the NFL & NBA NAACP conference..Shak (7'6" 380LB.) has a daily appointment with both..Looking forward to your No.6 ...what fun ..thank, please write fast ..we're waiting

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by Anonymous03/25/11

Great Sailing Story

My wife and I have been Bareboat sailing in the BVI several times, but only have tried sailing/sunbathing nude a couple of times. Your crew is doing it right. Every sailing Captains dream. ;-)
Your stories make us wish we where back there right now (it's freezing & snow in N/E)
We look forward to more adventures with Brad, Kelly & Kim.
Please keep writing

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by Anonymous03/25/11

Great story

There ought to be a sequel. Running a boat rental service?

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by Anonymous03/29/11

Wow

Lots of years reading here and this is absolutely one of the best and probably the hottest. Amazing how you used the VI to make the wild and crazy sex seem to make sense in the face of a deep and meaningful new relationship. Well done!

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by Anonymous03/30/11

Well done. Enjoyed that story to no end.

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by Anonymous04/01/11

Great I really enjo Story !!

As a veteran reader of erotic stories , I want to tell you that this series was one of the very best, HOTTEST, stories ever. I really enjoyed the characters, and the tropical settings. The only thing I would change would have been; in addition to Kell meeting his parents; that Jerry, Steve, Kim,Kell, and Brad open that sailing business in the VI. PPlease, more stories like these, or better yet...a sequel with these same 4 characters. WELL DONE!!!

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by Grantus04/04/11

Fun romp!

Well done. That was amazing, all of it! The characters were well crafted and the storyline built nicely from one chapter to the next. A good balance between the unreal, utter raunchiness and moments of "reality." The inner dialogue was a fun touch as well. The descriptions of the Virgin Islands were vivid and brought back good memories of my own. You were able to set each scene without getting bogged-down in details and intricacies (like going between USVI and BVI). Instead, all we were left with was a great story.

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by Anonymous04/05/11

Very, Very Nice.

Excellent. I hope to read more from you. This series was great. Can you top it????

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by Anonymous04/14/11

BVI

I love this story, particularly as I have lived and worked in the BVI. I went straight to Google Earth and Virgin Gorda, and Bitter End sheesh been there. Keep writting you have a talent I do not have, thank you.

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by Anonymous04/22/11

Love this!

What another person said, write a sequel. PLEASE!

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by edwards2104/23/11

Excellent, except I honestly felt the ending was a bit abrupt. I kinda wanted to see if the business aspect turned into something. I think that would have been an awesome tack to explore (no sailing pun intended). Still, great job!

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by patient104/25/11

More, please.

Enjoyed the story and got to care about the characters.

So, is there a bachelor party before the wedding?

Is there another sailing trip for a honeymoon? Where did they settle down/ how did they earn a living?

There are lots of options... even if things don't all happen quite the way or as soon as we might expect.

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by Anonymous04/25/11

friends

dude by far one of the best stories out there
what i was wondering is if they all remained close friends afterwords

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by Anonymous06/17/11

Incredible

The characters were loveable, believable and you gave a great description of falling in love. I would read more of your sories if available. Just one wee nag..loose the 'slimy' adjective...

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by Anonymous06/30/11

"Fuck Me" . Great story definately 6 stars.

Great story, cant wait for the book :-) .Looking at your timeline hopefully another story should be coming soon..........

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by Anonymous07/08/11

"The strongest cocktail I've ever had......





.....and I'm drunk with it."

'Simply beautiful' comes to mind but falls woefully short of doing this justice.

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by jay_lerand07/17/11

Awesome series, brilliantly written with just the right combination of scene settng and sex to keep the interest going... Thank you and I look forward to reading more of your work.

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by Pilots1107/23/11

Great Series

Great series of stories, hated to see them come to an end. Wonderful description of the tropics, which the wife loved, and the sex just seemed to flow naturally into the stories. Those were the part I enjoyed the most of course. Looking forward to reading more from you, perhaps a sequel, that would be assume.

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by LUSTYWHEELS08/05/11

An awesome story

I loved the journey although at times it was a bit too sappy but still readable. ;) I'm impressed you only mixed up Kim and Kelly's names a few times in each chapter. I'm a bit sad you rushed the end of the story and each sex scene wasn't developed further, I had hoped for a chapter per day of the trip. Perhaps if they start a company to take groups on private tours through the Virgins you can revisit this again. Or perhaps in a year they get married somewhere tropical and honeymoon 4 a month would make another good story. Thanks for your hard work I'm just sad too see a great thing end!

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by Anonymous08/08/11

I love the Caribbean and hope to return there someday. I'm married with children but I was able to live vicariously through your stories. Keep 'em comin' !!

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by Anonymous08/14/11

Loved the stories maybe you could add to them with boating company I'd read it for sure

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by Anonymous08/23/11

I would like to thank you for a very enjoyable, entertaining & (most importantly) sexy story. Keep up the good work.

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by Anonymous09/01/11

Wow.

That was a fucking amazing story. One of the best I have ever read. Not only was the sex hot but the emotional and character building was very, very well done. Even without the hot sex parts I would love to have had this experience myself. Well played sir. Well played.

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by Anonymous09/03/11

A Joy to Read

Everything was perfect with this series, characterization, balance, structure, and it made it so enjoyable. I look forward to any other series you write. The only thing that you MAYBE could have improved is that the ending seemed slightly rushed, but it's not really an issue. Thanks for writing it!

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by Anonymous09/30/11

zzzzz..boring

Seriously? Waste of words. Dry, boring. Start over. You need a hot fuck to get your writing going.

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by Anonymous10/11/11

A full experience

I really liked it. The juiciness and the surprising love aspect. Something that few experience in a more open sexual situation. I was moved..

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by Anonymous11/15/11

Well Done

Awesome, Wife and I loved the whole series, well done. Here’s hoping for a sequel.

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by Anonymous01/24/12

hot, but...

Five stars for going the whole nine yards with the fantasy idea. And the sex was great. And really, that's most of what is needed for an erotic story, for most people.

Other than that, this story leaves much to be desired. After the first chapter, all story development is skin deep, and character behavior so silly that it gets distracting. Plus, you occasionally had characters say something maybe worth a minor chuckle then had all the characters supposedly dying of laughter. It was like an editor told you to put humor in the story and you just didn't know how. Anyway, I did enjoy the stories overall, clearly, but had to resort to skimming the silliness after awhile. I wouldn't be so critical except that these stories rate so highly and could have been much better.

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by clive_iluvnyc02/14/12

Hot and thanx

Hot, hot, hot. Thanx for sharing this series with us. Great addition to this community. Would love to see more from your pen.

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by Paulunator03/07/12

The ending...

... is a letdown. There's no getting around it. Pretty much everything before that was sizzling hotness from one second to the next with very few overt flaws.
They were only, what, three or four days into the cruise? Nothing worth describing happened in the remaining week? Come on.
I think that having the cruise be ten days long was overambitious. Things progress too quickly for that due to the minute-by-minute descriptions, and keeping the story fresh and interesting while maintaining the same pace would have been difficult.
I really hope you'll keep writing, though. You have serious talent, and it would be a shame to let it go to waste.

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by Funguy110207/17/12

great series...

Nice to read someone who has actually bare boated those waters adding a fantasy of fantasies!

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by Anonymous07/23/12

Awesome

This is definitely a story for masterbation. I LOVED it! It'd be great if you created a sequel about Jerry buying up the yachts and everyone going in business together. Sharing more sexy stories, fulfilling more fantasies, meeting new people and basically creating more of the life we all want back home, with our fingers in our pussies, want to read.

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by JohnnyMax09/08/12

Lots more needed

Telling his ex she is totally ex'd, Further adventures cruising. Lots more could be done with this. One recommendation - take care with the names, a couple of places you got them mixed up.

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by Anonymous09/10/12

Perfect balance

What a beautiful blend of adventure, romance, and lots of great sex.

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by Delicose09/30/12

That was awesome!

Please, keep writing!

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by TLC5610/12/12

The Next Adventure?

I don't often make comments but this is a good story. If you don't already have something in the woodwork, you could continue the adventure. I can even see a book in the future. I'm just saying.

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by Anonymous10/28/12

Wow

I have never ever left a comment on a story but that has just blown my mind. Please can you write more of the same. I do t know how many times I frigged myself. Thank you

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by jchickory12/13/12

A totally different reaction to a terrific tale...

I'm no stranger to erotic literature. The stories I favor the most I finish in a post-orgasmic haze. Maybe it's just my current emotional state, but reading your story didn't follow that pattern.
It was certainly graphic enough. I find no fault in it's arousal potential. The problem is that I got caught up in the story. Go figure.
So I'll thank you for a wonderfully graphic tale and congratulate you for a well written piece.

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by CajunBill12/22/12

BVI Paradise

Been there, loved it. I had the best New Year's of my life at "Foxy's Bar" on Jost Van Dyke. Surely you can follow this up with the charter company..... Charlie Carey who I met in New Orleans chucked the corporate life and founded "The Moorings" in the BVI's.
CajunBill

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by erwin116612/31/12

Excellent

I thought other stories were great, and the reading experience could get any better, but your excellent composition delivered, it just blew all the other stories I read out of the water

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by Anonymous01/01/13

sooo good

This story should be made into a movie, it has all the right ingredients, good story, great environment and fantastic sex.

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by ByronBrandt01/26/13

Fantastic adventure!

Not only was the sex hotter than 99% of the best stories on here, you've got a fantastic love story to go along with it!

My only complaint, as minor as it is in the face of the rest of the story, is that we don't get to find out what happened with Brad's ex-girlfriend.

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by abadmirer02/06/13

Sex and sailing - bravo!

Great story - lotsa sex and some sailing too! Definitely a cut above most other offerings.

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by Anonymous02/12/13

The best

Quite simply the best story on Literotica. Nothing more to say really, you nailed it.

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by tompo29602/13/13

Awesome

One of the best stories I have read. Well Done. Just a fabulous romantic love story.

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by Anonymous02/20/13

Jesus! Write some more!

That was a fantastic read, I hope you share another story soon!

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by Anonymous03/01/13

Awesome

Thank-you for sharing.

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