All Comments on 'Ceremony of Rebirth'

The story was very erotic, but it might have made more sense if you had started the story with a paragraph or two introducing the setting and the reason for the ritual. Also, the change in verb tenses in the first couple paragraphs was a bit distracting.

A creative little story with some hot sex. Good luck in the contest.

Your descriptive imagery was yummy! Goodluck! :)

~Luna