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Cam and Jan

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by Anonymous

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by magpie4504/03/11

wow need more but can you make it longer

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by Sevda104/03/11

more

I am currently working on Chapter 2. Thank you so much for your comment.

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by jimh6704/03/11

Very Good. I'm glad you're writing more. Some nipple and clit teasing bringning them to the edge and then denying them would be nice.

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by Anonymous04/03/11

nice tone, looking for more

natural dominance is great touch, serving wine, begging to enter- hot story without the usual fetish cliches, write more

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by fallensaviour04/04/11

Excellent story but...

i dont know...something about it just seemed a little forced in the relationship between sevda cam and jan maybe its just me not being able to understand the feelings and emotions involved...and maybe it will be revealed in part 2

but it doesnt make sense for me for jan to (apparently) randomly turn her back on cam and then for cam to submit to sevda like that...

like i said i eagerly await part two and hopefully answers :D

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by Anonymous04/09/11

"Leasbian"--heh, heh.

Hee, hee.

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by FromSun04/12/11

Sloppy

Very sloppy writing (on the technical side of things), but some nice touches and great tone. Would very much like to see more.

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