All Comments on 'A Walk I Will Never Forget'

This turned me off completely and I had come to the site for a little stimulation....

I'm sorry, but after a while I could no longer follow the story line because of your lack of any punctuation and the misuse of words. (quiet, not quite)

Have someone proofread your work to correct the spelling, punctuation, and proper verb tense and you should be ok.

Thank you for sharing your story. It was a nice little sexy story. Good luck in the contest.