All Comments on 'Holidaying, With A School Friend'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Decent Concept...but

the sentence structure was way too awkward. It was difficult to read - with some editing it could be could.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
hey there

that story was to weak not that great

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Badly written

Ever hear of punctuation? 'Cause it didn't look like it to me.

Hard to follow. 0 stars.

ChrisTor22ChrisTor22almost 13 years ago
good concept but poor punctuation and spelling detracted from enjoyment

Did you even read this over once before posting??

Where to begin??? MUCH more description of you, your body, your arousal, your humiliation and your first nakedness, first intercourse, first male-induced orgasm....all could have been fleshed out and had everyone begging for more and giving you 5 stars, instead of wanting to cane you ourselves!!

Don't give up...let's see your revenge!! Let's see him cane his sister! Let's see some twists and turns as he gets you back in his clutches and punishes you anew....more conversation and more oral submission from you would liven it up... he's used your mouth (far too little description of that act!!) and taken your virginity....so perhaps it's time to offer up (or have taken) your delectable arse!! Maybe he needs to punish you outside, or in front of his friends (or to invite his sister to join in, in punishing you?)....so MANY possibilities!! LOL

Cheers!

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