All Comments on 'A Long Walk Home Ch. 14'

...that will have to wait now, i already cant wait for next chapter and i havent read this one yet

So now we know her true name and she remembers what happen and who left her that was very well written Lady J :)

Dayton and Freya and him having to show her and prove to her that he only wants her and what one kiss ( eek loved that little part) does to him and that he will wait til she is ready to realizer wht everyone else already knows for them.

If Gard didnt already feel bad about knowing who she was and what he did all those years ago to see what her reaction is to knowing it was him that has to hurt worse then anything that he did that to his future mate.

Cant wait until the next chapter. Would give more then five stars if i could.

Keep up the fantastic work.

jaz this has to be one of the best chapters i have ever read of any story period it blew my mind away i am dying to read the next chapter thank you for posting this one

although it made me cry for Rayne! But still loving this story! 5 Stars my dear!

A great development to a great story. Had a great time reading it.

I laughed, I cried, and now I am excited for more. Loved the teaser on Twitter. How about another one?:-) Crap I have to get up in 4 hours for a 12 hour shift. I swear my husband must think I am cheating on him with someone on the computer. I'll have to tell him it's with Jazcullen's writing..LOL

My God woman, you are nothing short of phenominal!!! This chapter is beyond mere mortal words. A mere 5 stars is not even a worthy start, you should be on the best sellers list!!! This humble "Jaz Junkie" begs for more...lol

Tereasa

You are brilliant as ever! Loved the chapter but long for more!

amazing as usual and awwwe. dayton is so loving towards freya and she deserves every bit of it. I really hope rayne comes to terms quickly before gard does something stupid. love you and your work. keep it up can't wait for the next chp

words cant even describe the greatness of this chapter....

Girl, I would go on and on about your greatness, but well... ummm... actually I think I might lol :P

Loved this chapter, loving the story. As you know, I have a love/hate relationship with Freya, but I love her insecurity in this. She is quite a fragile thing here :) You are incredible, you are talented, you are amazing, you are (insert the rest of the thesaurus here!)

LOVE IT x100

Rafe went off didn't he? LMAO! I was so surprised at that! Never thought he'd threaten to bar her from his home. Wow.

Definitely an intense chapter. I LOVE Freya and her confusion about Day. She is definitely turning into my fav female character of the entire series.

Watch out when you publish a book! You may get more stalkers! Hehehee

Those had better be looooooong chapters then!

A pivotal chapter. At last it comes out what we've all suspected is true. It's gonna be difficult but Gard and Rayne will work out their problems.

I'm so lovin Freya and Day right now! They are the cutest couple! They haven't surpassed my favs, Andre and Loretta but they're a CLOSE second! Can't wait to see what's up next for them. Mark my words--Freya is going to surprise us all.

MEJ, great chapter.

I'm dyyyyyyyiiiiingggg! That was amaaaaaaaziiiiiiiinggggg!

A comment like that would usually work my nerves, but it's all i can say. this chapter was brilliant. i love love love where this is going, and you keep the story from losing color by adding complex emotional reactions (that are completely justified. I love this series and you're writing.

Seriously.

~TJ

It's all out. No more secrets. The path is now clear for 'happy ever aftering!'

Your writing has escalated again. You're making your ancients much more believable, and the clashes and conflicts between the players have a deeper tension now, that actually prompted me to make the move from my usual slouch, to an upright and alert position. LOL

Actually, that's saying a lot! I'm seriously loving this story, and it's getting better all the time. Or am I just fascinated because kitty cat has come back? We'll never know now. LOL

Thanks Jaz, now, how 'bout another treat and you releasing another chapter nice and early? Hmmm? LOL

Now I have to wait a week it is going to feel like forever! Brilliant chapter. Loved it!

...You could always post the other chapters sense you have them finished to prove me wrong, just saying. (:

the magic that is Jaz has struck again. *sigh*

i have to wait another week!!!!!! erg ur evil i love this story sooo much update early plz!

Between end of semester papers, Access assignments, & presentations, it is such a pure joy to unwind with your stories:)

I love the Caleb/Annie scene..I've missed them! The relationship between Dayton/Freya is just too cute:) And I'm soo looking forward to how Gard/Rayne's works out. Thanks!

N.M.A

I don't have much to say this week that I haven't said before except:

1. Brilliant, just bloody brilliant (at this point its pretty much a given :D)

2. I'm glad (and sad) to hear that you've finished the last chapter, so does that mean that we'll be able to have a chapter gracing the new submissions section every day with no waiting period? (Can you tell that my fingers are crossed for this?)

3. I've came to the realisation that I (as well as your many other fans) am extremely lucky and quite privileged to be able to read and comment on these beautifully written and structured stories for free. As much as I would love to purchase and own your excellent works of ficton (and I will as soon as possible) I feel the need to thankyou for the great honour of being a part of this growing family.

So thankyou, your eternal groupie Zooey :D

I stayed up to midnight waiting for it. I refused to hit the refresh button until then. At the stroke of 12 it happened! BAM - next installment

I no longer have enough words, adjectives... to compliment you on how well you tell a story. This chapter was excellent. The anguish in Rayne just left me breathless. The weight of the guilt in Gard is overwhelming. The acceptance and peacefulness radiating off of Freya stunning.

Congratulations!

Sings *simply the best* in a very bad Tina Turner impression!!

"You took the words right out of my mouth!" Sung in a very,very bad Meatloaf impression. Because you are right Jaz is simply the best. Bet my Tina Turner is worse than yours. LOL

A good balance between Annie/Caleb, Day/Freya/Rayne. It was all wrapped up nicely in a really complete and clean chapter.

Can't wait for more

Thank you. Your writing gives me something every week to look forward to. AMAZING! U Rock!!

This keeps getting better and better. What a fanstic storyteller you are Jaz, I can't wait for the next instalment.

Great chapter jaz and cannot wait for the next instalment.

it's going to end soon :( :( :(

WOW that says it all. Can't wait for more.

after so much thinking & waiting I started writing without thinking bcoz if I kept on thinking 4 what to write a new chapter wud be posted.

Anyway Jazz your today's chapter was like a ointment , as it helps on pain your chap was a gift which relieved my overloaded nerves and soothed them.

Simply beautiful, just started reading when end arrived. I was shocked that how it ended so fast I dont know but it was superb. Anakatrine's lot more powerful than last time and is easily controlling the situation with caleb's help. Dayton and Freya are cute and mostly Freya's not innocet but still cutely innocent as she doesnot know whats happening to her.

Jazz you rock , just post new chapter fastly as many people are intrested and dying to read more.

O

At least Rayne is back now. That's crazy that she remembers...but good in a way I guess, once she gets passed all these emotions she's going through.

I wished you'd of written that Gard was forcibly removed from Rayne... I know, I know I am not the author I am just saying... Think his pain would of come through more that way! Absolutely loved it... superb writing as always and one more step to the end :'(

now that rayne knows who and what she is, the healing process should be interesting, and i think it gard who is going to actually take longer to heal, he has all the time to think about,

I'm pretty sure I've already said everything before and have nothing new to say/add, but I love your writing and I love this story!

Awesome as always hun and glad Rayne and everyone knows the truth and now can deal with all the pain and let it go and concentrate on pulling everyone together and having more babies plus helping the young ones with their powers.

Can't wait to read more, keep up the excellent work

Donna

Okay...so I devoured this chapter in record time. One week is hard to wait for! I really wish I had the talent that you have!

With the introduction of both Dayton and Rayne you have added a new depth to all of your characters. You have added an emotional depth not seen in your previous characters. Whether it's Daytons hate of life. Rayne and her feeling of being so different. Freya and her self hate, Gard and him finding his mate after all this time. That doesn't include the lives that the four of them touched. Nors and Ash's fear of losing Freya, the pain Annie felt from her connection to Gard just to name a few. You have become a better writer with this new depth you have achieved. Congratulation

you truly are amazing Jaz. Such talent!!! What a chapter!! You bring another level of excellence in your story. Wow!! Simply wonderful! Now i am out of superlatives. hahahaha. keep it coming.... can't wait to read the next chapter and how the story will unfold. :)

As always it was well worth the wait, I am very glad I did not succumb to temptation and read your teaser.

With each passing chapter I find it increasingly hard to come up with original things to give feed back on.

Without further adeau, so analysis.

I love the shocking duality you have Annie portray in this chapter. Her dark side Ankatrine taking so much control even Caleb has trouble accepting it. Then totally turning the tables and having her back to the loving Annie she was, Caleb setting her free just for those fleeting moments. Classic textbook use of duality.

Freya, Rayne and Day

What an odd twist you've pulled here, unexpected yet it seemed perfectly fine. This was good progression, Day growing ever stronger, Freya trying to cope with feelings she's never had to deal with and Rayne finally getting the answer she needed although coming with a huge price.

The only thing I could find or caution you with is the very same thing you cautioned me against. It felt rushed, I guess it's a given with a busy chapter such as this one. It did not take away from it though, it probably added to the sense of urgency this chapter seems to exude. So may problems and short tempers, it almost leads to this type of fast paced style of chapter.

Overall great chapter!

As allways, I eagerly await your next chapter.

Yes the wait was wort it.every time you write a new chapter you bring more life into your character and the world surrounding then.beautiful ,keep the good work up

Cliffhangers will be the death of me! Love the flow and twists of the story, POST MORE please and hurry!!!

Poor Rayne, my heart breaks for her but she is strong and will kick his ass once she gets over the shock, excellent writing as always and of course MORE MORE

When are you going to post the next chapter? Please do not take to long, I really want to know what happens with RayandGard. HURRRY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

~I was once a recovering JazJunkie, now I know I am helpless in the face of the love of her vampires and weres. I have gone from a fan, to groupie, and now full blown addict, and I relish my addiction.~

Heehee, this in one h*ll of a ride you are taking us on. I am most amazed by Rafe, I would never have thunk it. This series is so special because we see the original characters we have become so invested in and thier growth. You also treat us to new characters brought to us with so much depth!

From the start I said I'd love to buy your books... I still love paper. It has been an honor to witness your growth as an artist. You know I'll be waiting to read along with the rest of your merry horde.

Peace and joy,

Shell

Bad Jaz! I *hate* cliffhangers!

Now I have to wait a whole week to see what happens next!!

But besides that: great chapter, and great editing! =)

WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYY....GRRRR CAN YU PLZ HURRY UP WITH THE NEXT CHAPTER!!!!!!! GOSH

U are so killin me. I found you by accident last yr. when I was trying to click on another story. Ever since then I've been so hooked!!! Please hurry and post new chapters. Loving it!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I agree with everybody else. Great chapter. Beings you said you have completed "A Long Walk Home" Does that mean you can post the last 6 chapters quicker than once a week and end the torture of we your devoted followers.

This is an amazing chapter. You write so quickly! Thank you! You intertwine the story threads so thoughtfully. This, however, is my favorite.

And thats all Im gonna say about this chapter! Now hurry up with the next one!!! Your HHIC

So thank you for giving me my future daughter's name (il shala)....it's going to be Sarayne.....absolutely love it...maybe when she's 18 and if you decide to transpose this into a novel I'll give it to her as a gift. The first commentor couldnt have said it better....stupendous.....amaaaazzzzzing. So now that you've finished writing the remaining chapters...what say you post all of them and let's have a marathon till the end. I think everyone will agree with me on this one....the suspense is not nice...we're on heart attack street here right near hyperventilation lane which is close enough to death's door for me. I can't stand it lady......t h e r e s t o f t h e c h a p t e r s p l e a s e

. . . every time :)

great chapter. Good plot, good characters, and good emotions. Thanks!

Please post the next chapter(s) ASAP!

im going crazy thinking about what may happen. the plot that you've set up through the whole story is amazing and how all the stories are intertwinded keeps everything interesting.

I have the best, most fantastic job in the world, editing for Jaz - because I get the stories first. It is a gift though and not a job. I am so blessed to be able to do it. All I can say to you all is hold on for the ride in the future chapters. I just finished editing the last chapter and was bawling like a baby for the first time in reading any of Jaz's work. I know you will all be as impressed as I am with the remaining chapters. God blessed us all when he gave Jaz the talent that she has and then blesses us again when she decided to share it all with us. Can you tell I am a number one Jaz addict??? - lol

more please more!!!......you are killing me here, needless to say it would be a sweet death ;)

great update as always jaz!!

well done. now what?

what a place to stop!! Sigh, patience is a virtue, I have to keep reminding myself. What an amazing Story i just cant get enough!! I need more!! please!!! LOL

this whole series is killer more please

as per usual:D

I usually check every week for future installments but now I think Im going to change my routine.

Im going to wait as long as I can to read your new chapters.

I dislike finishing the chapters so quickly and I keep wishing it was neverending.

Thanks Jazz for all your hard work.

And my thanks to your editor as well for keeping the fans happy.

^_^ love it, love it, love it. Another great chapter. though the suspenseful endings are killing me as i have to wait for the next one. This just affirms how good this series is. A pleasure to read as always and thank you for writing. ^_^

I loved this chapter

I feel so bad for Gard, I hope Rayne can work through this, you made me cry when you descriped her distress :'(

It's a great chapter! I really hope that someday you'll get to publish your work :)

Once, again, you have wrote another amazing chapter to this story!! I love that you added Annie/Caleb, Rayne/Gard and Dayton/Freya into it and made it start to come together. I sure wished you would publish your stories, as they are just completely outstanding, Jaz!!!!!!

I was scared at first when everyone was in this one, but you handled yourself very well. there was so much info, but everything was said. Grawesome!

I loved that!!! Awesome story, can't wait for the next installment.

Wow... More More More PLEASE!!!!! I find myself looking every other day to find a new posting. I'm sure others agree this is just way to wonderful, I'll take reading a 7pager with "A Long Walk Home".

Poor Gard. That's enough guilt for a lifetime. I hope forgiveness doesn't take too long in coming.

So good! Can we PLEASE have a double week again???? Pretty PLEASE?

I keep rereading the chapters in the hopefully-not-too-vain hope that the next one will be out by the time I'm done....

Goddamit! Reading 14 chapters in one go spoiled me rotten and now i have to wait like everybody else ;( I tried to stay away until this series was completed but i just couldn't... like a true JazCullen hoar XD

I agree. I too tried to stay away until the end of this series...but I couldn't. I am now sitting here screaming in my head that he shouldn't have left her there. And that like everyone else I have to wait....and I am not patient!!! LOVED IT!!

As always you did a great job. Though I am behind on my chapters do to vacation, I will catch up very soon. I did enjoy my vacation but I missed your new chapters. I had to give all my time to the loving family. Now I'm back and ready to read, read, read.... Thanks for the great story. I really enjoyed it.

Damn you to hell, you rat-bastard of an evil author. You're making me cry again!

I agree with her your making me cry again too dammit what a great chapter. So many emotions.

Damn....You are amazing ! You can probably have your stories published . PLEASE...May we have some more !(._.)

you are EVIL you make people cry... EVIL! Lol anyway blew me away LOL

J@ckel Konsur

I am reading your series in chronological order and I only have a couple more of this one and then Hearts of warriors. I guess I'll have to start back over again. I am definitely Hooked on your work. FanFuckingTastic!!!!

So sad right now....You are good at what you do. Can't wait to finish!!!!

You're probably tired of this universe...take a vacation but DON'T LEAVE US!!!! Elves, Witches, Warlocks.....give us SOMETHING for 2013!!!! Sensai, you're THE MASTER!!!! Hang in there....It's YOUR UNIVERSE and I'm just a Peeping Tom passing through....give me a reason to stay!!!!! lol!!!

just as good 2nd time around..

LOVE IT!

You are a brilliant author.

I thank whatever deity there is that I started reading this now rather than having to wait for each chapter. Being able to read each chapter back to back is a blessing!

I was so keen to get to the next chapter I almost forgot to give the 5 star rating - had to come back to this chapter to do it!

Really good heart-rending stuff!

I hope you can make enough from your writing to not be distracted by other work. Not just because you deserve to, but so you'll write more!

Your free stories on Literotica are greatly appreciated by this impoverished skinflint, but they're definitely good enough to be worth paying for!

And it's just a funny observation: when Rayne cut herself why would she need antibacterial wipes? I guess I never thought of these beings as prone to infection...like I said, it was more curiosity than critique or criticism.

I've read several of your stories several times, and while I enjoy them and the intricate world you've woven, I end up skipping more and more every time I read. You have a wonderful cast of diverse strong women, but it seems like you wrote one male and then copy pasted him a dozen times.

Personally I'm not a huge fan of the magic element, I think you write the down to earth vamp/were so well introducing past lives and magic makes it all kind of complicated and basically makes the weres insignificant for anything but having vampire babies.

Your stories are good.... But your characters are over dramatic... It's like the young and the restless times ten... They over react to a simple situation seems like every couple of.minutes...

-jaye-