All Comments on 'Parasol Ch. 01'

Great start! She's surly, but endearing. The kids seem overbearing, yet still come off cute. Can't wait to read more.

to read a story so well told by a talented writer(especially in this "IR" category). The tale is full of smiles, real people, and clever lines. Love the writing!!!

I, can only hope that the next installment of this story will appear soon.

Thank you.

I can't wait until she meets the uncle. Very original unwanted love story.

*****

Interesting start.

Five.

its good the way you humanize all the characters.

The story is funny in refreshing way - n

Those kids are going to make her love them. Can't wait until the next chapter

Thanks for a great read. Looking forward to reading more.

this sory definatly shows alot of promise. damn this children do sound so very enoying.

Another new IR series to look forward to. Don't make us wait too long though!

i hope you do its seeem like it could be a really good story so i hope you write more

But to me the story kinda flat-lined... So this is my second attempt at it... Hope I get it right this time... And Thank you for the reviews!!!

Got hooked on your story Sweetness, and had to check out your other submissions. Your writing is great and shows real promise if you decide to continue, which I really hope you do. Can't wait for the next installment, keep up the good work. :)

Don't be so harsh on the children. but it's very funny now that my own children are grown, and I'm savoring every bit of quietness. Continue to write MabelCinnamon. I'm going to enjoy these stories for days on end.

Your description of the Storm kids had me rolling. I REALLY like this story. Looking forward to the next chapter.

WHERE'S THE REST OF THE STORY?

Now this story I truly love already! It's humorous, the kids are a nightmare, and I can only imagine how disruptive Malcolm will also be, but I'm sure it won't be in the way her annoying neighbors are. This kind of reminds me of my life, I can really relate to Theresa. Can't wait to see what happens; please post the rest of it, soon!

This is a HILARIOUS start...I can so relate to how she has no peace with these 'spawns of Satan'. My house is the resident meeting place in the neighborhood :)

Why didn’t finish this story? You have a GREAT beginning to what could be a GREAT story. To bad you didn’t finish it.