All Comments on 'Sisters Under Covers Ch. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
nice story need more

you should get you and your sister involved with your mother, then maybe your daddy if you need help contact seve461@yahoo.co.uk

Corpse_riderCorpse_rideralmost 13 years ago
Twisted sisters

Very well written, engaging and sensitively written first chapter. Good characterisation, a nice build up to the next instalment with some built in tension and hints at what may be coming later. Well worth reading.

bluewillybluebluewillybluealmost 13 years ago
Great start

Nice setup, enjoyed it very much! Lokking forward to chapter 2.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Nice and gentle

A good beginning to what I hope will be more erotic adventures between the two. PLease keep it to the sisters and their friends. Please keep the guys out of it.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
watch your tenses

Check your tenses, shifting from present to past is a distraction. Nice Story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
A FAMILY AFFAIR

Get it on and bring their mother in and then their father perhaps catching the three of them out and and being seduced to join them

SuperBad009SuperBad009almost 13 years ago
wow

I have to question myself. I've never been turned on by a piece of incest work, but, Lord have mercy, I do believe that I am now! Good work! It definitely needs some editing, but it is a good beginning.

raymotraymotalmost 13 years ago
Thanks for this one

Very nicely constructed story, especially good considering the lack of editor. I'm looking forward to more in this vein. Thanks for your efforts, keep up the good work.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Don't add the father.

Add Mom and keep it a sapphic love fest.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
more character development please!

Don't go making the situation more complicated until your readers have a solid understanding of the two major characters you've introduced so far. Lesbian incest is only an interesting area to explore if there are real chracters behind it, otherwise it may as well just be two random people screwing.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Intense

Must continue. Always keep it slow and deliberate. Add mom, then mom's sister then a multii-way as a finish. No men allowed

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

More, much more! I little more detail on the girls would be nice too

imharmless69imharmless69almost 13 years ago
Excellent

Loved the slow burn, the tension and the gentleness. Can't wait to read more from you.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
A real turn-on

I remained hard almost from the opening line...

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

brilliant keep on writing

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
WOW !!

Your writing skills made me feel like I was right there, experiencing all of that with you.

Regarding your editor, you don't need their help in my opinion. Just keep writing....PLEASE !! 5 Stars from me.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

This is a great start to what promised to be a great series. Keep up the good work. I'll be watching for chapter 2

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

great story start.. can't wait for the next chapter.. keep it up.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
yes!

keep it going!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
YES!!!!

please keep it going

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Awesome!!!

That is all.

ErotonautErotonautalmost 13 years ago
Nicely done

Agree with the general sentiment that this needs at least one more chapter, hopefully one long enough for Corey to explain what suddenly prompted her to make a move on Taylor, and for Taylor to explore her own reactions.

maturemadness2maturemadness2almost 13 years ago
Awesome, keep it going

I have to agree with all the comments about at least another chapter. Would love to see some more character developement. Maybe get another set of sisters involved or heck, maybe even Mom too. Don't get carried away with turning a great story into a sexual extravaganza. Keep it light and erotic.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Great story

Please add another chapter. I can wait to hear how the sisters become even closer.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Great Story

I do hope that you add more to the story. It drew me in and I'm sure the next installment will do exactly the same.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

I want to read chapter 2 & 3 & ....

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

Loved it! Would love to see more!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

Awesome. More please

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Amazing

This was one of the best ones ive read hands down. what happens next?!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Awesome!

Loved it!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Nice

Excellent! Excellent! I gotta read more!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

plz continue the story, it was REALLY good ! :)

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
BRILLIANT

you must continue this story

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Beautiful

That was so nice. Sweet love.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

you should definitely continue the story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

Very erotic! Please continue!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
one of the best i have read, please continue!

one of the best stories I have read, you MUST continue this story!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
SEXY

This is the best one yet. Totally continue! This is so hot lol I luv it!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Keep going!

What happens next??

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Please continue

This NEEDS to be continued. This is one of the best lesbian stories on here.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
It was amazing

I really think u should continue, but try 2 make the next 1 longer

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

Really need to continue this story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

1 0f d gr8est stories here plz continue wid it

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Yes

Please continue, really hot!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
WONDERFUL

So erotic good storyline.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Amazing

Begging you to continue, so good.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Such a turn on

Love this story!

Need to continuou it!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
loved

keep writing the story I would like to read the endig if there is one.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
please continue

please comtinue this story it is wone of them ost erotic stories id ever heard so please continue it PLEASEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Well done!

Excellent story, please continue! I'm sure Taylor is excited to return the favor for her beautiful and sexy older sister. They'll have to be sneaky since they both live at home but it will be worth it I'm sure :)

Great stuff!!!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Please continue

This was so hot! We'd love to know what Taylor does next. Good job.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
more please.

so sender. so passionate. so loving. i think you should involve toys in the next one.

metheca2000metheca2000over 12 years ago

This was truly amazing, both hot in that DDAAAAAAMMMNNNN but also very sweet in their gentleness. I don't normally do incest but other than that this story was amazing 5stars and a favorite from me. Please continue this one day will you?

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
"MY NIPPLES HARD NOW TOO..."

Wow that was so hot!!!!!!!! Yes I want more!!!!!!!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
awesome

that was so exciting, we need more and maybe some sexy nylons

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Incredible!

I really don't want to sound generic, but this really WAS an INCREDIBLE story. I really hope with all my heart that you continue it.

earthserpentearthserpentover 12 years ago

yes i think you should continue the story. it sound like it needs to be continued or something. more chapters.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
very erotic

It had to be one of the most erotic stories I have ever read. Please continue

FUNFORUS2FUNFORUS2over 12 years ago
Erotic might be an understatment!

Great story! You need to continue this story. Please give us more! Excellent!

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Reaaally Good

its almost a crime to not keep going. 5 stars. more chapters plox!

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
amazing

this was so good!!

gimme more!!!!!! please!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago

loved this! such intense passion!

ForherloveForherlovealmost 12 years ago
Absolutely beautiful

Makes me wish I had a sister

Da1337dudeDa1337dudealmost 12 years ago
Awesome build-up and emotion, not so great finish

You did emotion really well. Really drew me in. One of the most realistic and plausible scenes I've seen. The build-up and nipple play was really cute, for want of a better word.

But after all that build-up, Corey doesn't even touch Taylor's privates? WTF? And then it seems like Corey orgasms almost as soon as she starts masturbating. Much of this story, especially towards the end, joins the ranks of the many stories who don't follow the "show, don't tell" rule. You stood out because you showed and didn't tell the emotions, but then you kind of stuffed it by telling instead of showing Corey's masturbation. After all that really-hot buildup, the reader wants something to come over at the end. There just...wasn't. Writing "and then she has an orgasm" is always a great way to ruin an ending. Yours was a little better than that, but could have been much better.

Please, more. And have them go further. Don't turn it into IKEA Erotica, or "and then she finger-fucked her roughly, shoving her digits up her pussy"; keep the same style and intimate, sensual and non-dirty tone, it's really hot and getting much rarer, but please, write more actions. Have them go further. Tell me how Corey's body feels, as well as her mind, and what she does to herself. Or what Taylor does to her. You left too much to my imagination, so I didn't have enough to build on. Don't say "[I] was furiously masturbating my pussy." Tell me how. What does she do?

I'm not saying it was bad. It was much better than most of what I read on here. But it needs something more. Most people go overboard with writing the physical actions and have no emotion. You swung too far the other way.

Talon5KarrdeTalon5Karrdealmost 12 years ago
More please!

Like @Da1337dude said, we need more!

I know you wrote this a year ago, but please write more. It is an amazing story!

redskinsfan6969redskinsfan6969almost 12 years ago
very good story

I would love to read more of this story and if u have more about sisters having sex together i would love to read those too

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Reminiscence

I read this story long ago and fell in love with it. I just had a sudden urge for this type of taboo again, and couldn't recall the story's name. I searched this site and couldn't find it by what i knew. So i googled lesbian sister story during movie night.

I loved this so much I had tp comment and sign up, to favorite this.

-Quocalimar

QuocalimarQuocalimaralmost 12 years ago
Just made official

lol best author on this site, there needs to be a 6 star rating for unmatched.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Redneck hicks

LOL... if my sister is good enough for me...

This story is dumb.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Finally!

The erotic buildup of breast play. Give it 5 cums and more please!

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
wow just fantastic.

Thanks. I could hardly breathe.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Awesome

Hey thanks for this mightyhans. It was awesome. Moving so gently, so slowly, so delicately. This is one of the best accounts of young love that I've ever read. I could visualise the two girls so much I could almost see them. I can't wait for chapter 2.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Would love to read more of this.

One of the most erotic, heartwarming and adorable stories I have ever read. To say I love it does not make it justice.

Anena84Anena84over 11 years ago
Would love to read more of this. Revisited.

Just a quick note: Please, if you are going to add another character to Corey and Taylor's relationship then please, add their mom. Please do NOT add their dad or some other guy or guys, that would utterly ruin the story. At least that is my opinion.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
...This is what physical, emotional and spiritual love is: The Blessed Triangle

...As Corey said to Taylor, this is beautiful. Yes, indeed!

ES003ES003over 11 years ago
Dripping, Leaking and Moaning

Very well written erotica. Had me hanging for the next line. Sweet and sexy. You should write more. I don't know but I swear you have to be a woman how well you described lesbian sex. Write more, it was over a 5.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago

hey nice

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago

Is it just a coincidence that the two main characters names are the first and last name of a rock singer

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
It was beautiful

. Romantic & sweet & subtle. yesssss !

puncturepunctureover 10 years ago

That was brilliant. I do hope you will write much more

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago

Loved it, more more more!!!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
SERIOUSLY

You gotta ask if we want more, you're already in my favourite's waiting for next chapter. Hurry

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
GREAT

PLEASE make more of these i loved it

your writing is Amazing

BenevolentDCCBenevolentDCCabout 9 years ago
Loved it.

More please. Loved this soo much!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
MORE!!!!!!

I would love to read more, next one soon please.

Randee1958Randee1958almost 8 years ago
Amazing

I'm blown away with this story. You just have to bring them into the next phase of their lives. Please. Allow us to partake, of what is awaiting them. 5🌟's 😍😍😍

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Perfect

Thos was a short but perfect story. You're a good writer and I really want you to make chapter 2

Leapyearbaby29Leapyearbaby29over 7 years ago
Please write a Part 2!!!!!!

Please write a Part 2!! Cory needs to pleasure Taylor!! Like more then hear greats! Please continue this story!!

If you want to answer back, mumclaren@gmail.com

dexwhite17dexwhite17over 7 years ago
Great Tease

I love the focus of breast play between the sisters here!

I'd love to read more. Great read.

Leapyearbaby29Leapyearbaby29almost 7 years ago
Review

So Taylor is in love with Corey but is Corey in love with Taylor? I would love to see Corey pleasuring Taylor all the way. ;)

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Do

Definitely do continue it was the best story I have ever read

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Truly wonderful and Amazing

Love the first chapter, truly love the slow build up. Definately would love to read more so please keep writing and continue this story into a series

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago

Please continue this! I would love to see Corey go all the way with Taylor! This was Part 1 so I hope we get Part 2! :)

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Very hot

I had my wife read this story while I went down on her and she came twice.

That was the first time she ever reacted like that. My wife who is straight is now reading lesbian stories with me. This is very hot.

Please.....continue

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Please continue!

Your story was amazing. You don't need an editor ... express yourself!

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
FANTASTIC

I loved this story, it is so brilliantly written you do not need an editor. PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE continue this story it is so incredibly beatiful as well as erotic. The LOVE between these two sisters is amazing and so caring. I LOVED IT. PLEASE MORE.

ImNIndyImNIndyalmost 4 years ago
Yes, indeed, more ...

More please.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Please please, pretty please continue this story. It's such a good story, I feel this incompleteness inside me, just because this story has no continuation.

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