All Comments on 'Hidden Love'

An original, well written sex fantasy. Did she have to sit on the eggs until they hatched?

In all honesty I couldn't say Corpse on the egg incubation. I could write it in so many fashions that I had decided to leave it up to the reader to decide. There's really no right or wrong answer.

Thanks much for the comment as well. Ill have to write a couple more stories of this sort in the future. Maybe swap the genders around. When I do write stories, this and the other I have submitted were the very first drafts, my own mind making it up as I go and an immediate submit after I get to a point where I feel it could be done. I can't stand revising my own work so I make sure I do it right the first time.

A good story if a little short and seemingly truncated at the end. To my mind you had the beginnings of a good story and plenty of plot points to go forward with.

Why doesn't the new boyfriend like her? What does her mum do when she finds out her daughter's left? How do they get to their eventual destination? Who do they meet along the way.

So from me 3 stars

Now you could write a story about their offspring. Would their sons' mates also lay eggs? Their daughters probably would. Keep writing!

Well done, but I was bugged by your use of "breath" instead of "breathe."

I liked the sex scene, and I'm glad you gave the characters a little development. The end was too abrupt of a change, however.

But overall, I look forward to more. Keep up the good work!

BUT, the same problem, to abrupt. Take the time to explore the characters, and "scale" them out. You weave wondrous tales of love, but suffer from premature ejaculation ;-) Please finish as your characters deserve. Quit being selfish.

I thought the ending was funny.

You really had it cute, sweet, and sexy everything I want but I rarely find. but you ruined the ending😥😥

The ending had me laughing:p Good story, i liked it. :)

Great story would love to get to know these characters even more. You should write more stories of dragons and perhaps do a full romance with them I would definitely read it. Keep on writing great job.

A short but nice story although I didn't like the fact that the dragons in general did not breathe fire, perhaps you could say that Seloran was to young or something. But I did like how they ended up having kids together, it was cute.