All Comments on 'Home'

I can't wait to see what happens next. I' am curious about what happen to Nate's son and Peyton's back story. Can't wait for chapter 2 continue to good work!

interesting start. perfect grammar. can't wait to see where this goes. and damn this guy is tall! my neck kind hurts just thinking about how tall he is.

anxiously awaiting more chapters!

Kitty

I really like it! Can't wait for the next chapter!

Excellent first effort.

Five.

love the first story you wrote. and now want to read more. the writing was good the story also. so when are you going to post your next one can you tell me home sound a good name

and only Katty knows where it's going, or maybe not.

Romance, LW, or it might stay Inter-racial.

In any event, it would need a couple more characters to develop plot. More info on his (deceased?) wife and/or child, some of her background, up-bringing-wise, (evil foster-folk?) and they'll all need to tie in at their wedding, which won't be until after the birth of the child she is carrying ( evil foster-father's child).

or differently, or not at all, (which would be a pity)

Cheers, and for this far, Thanks.

Kilroy.

Original and promising start, can't wait to see where you go from here and how Peyton and nate will interact. Will defnitely be waiting for your next update.

And a very fine first post. I'll be looking out for more.

Too short, and no indication whether there is a Ch.02 to follow. And clearly, hardly the ending of the story. So.....mixed bag.

I would like to see where you will take this story.

*****

I want to be kissed on my jaw that way, I can tell this is going to be a good read.

So far, so good. If you can keep the interest you have so far generated, you will have a successful debut. I appreciate your efforts and most of all I appreciate you sharing them with us (me).

I have the feeling this is going to be a very good story. Please do not let over zealous commenters chase you away from finishing this story.

Really great beginning

this could a really good story i love it already cant wait for more so would you please update soon thanks

ok, im intrigued.

I would really like to see characters physical traits be revealed through the eyes of other characters. It keeps a sense of humility.

Comes in all shapes and sizes for us all. It's good to see that the Church is available for all that needs them in their time of need. Looking forward to more on them.

interesting but its going too fast, no build up

Hot....

Hot... natural sexual chemistry/tension

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smərk/

verb

verb: smirk; 3rd person present: smirks; past tense: smirked; past participle: smirked; gerund or present participle: smirking

1.

smile in an irritatingly smug, conceited, or silly way.

"he smirked in triumph"

synonyms: smile smugly, simper, snicker, snigger; leer

"I hate the way they just sit there smirking"

noun

noun: smirk; plural noun: smirks

1.

a smug, conceited, or silly smile.

"Gloria pursed her mouth in a self-satisfied smirk