All Comments on 'Anya Becomes a Slave'

I think it's very good. A few misspelled words but excellent :) good job!

pretty good first effort. watch your spelling and grammar. might be good to seek out an editor to help with that.

there are a few spelling and grammar errors but i think youre doing great

i really enjoyed it ;)

This is quite a good story and has plenty of potential to be a very good multi-installment story. Spelling errors aside i would like to have seen a bit more of Anya's emotions also some background on how Ms. Davis knew Anya to be submissive.

You mean to sit there and admit that you have Failed to write a second Chapter to this story? Contemplate and then administer your own punishment before you get to work on the next in this series.

More!

the only good thing about this story is that there is only one, and I hope there is no more of this

As soon as Ms Davis called Anya a slut, little cunt, whatever, Anya should kicked Ms Davis in the face and beaten the crap out of her, Then she should tie up Ms Davis strip her and take pictures of Ms Davis licking her pussy and licking her ass.

Then she should take the pictures Ms Davis has , take them home and have them photo shopped with Ms Davis's face on them and blackmail ms Davis that she either stops her sex slave stuff or Ms Davis is ruined,