All Comments on 'Giving My Little Sister a Massage'

OMG that was intense! The story was well told. The slow simmer had me boned up like I haven't been in a long time. Kudos to you for a great job. Uhhh. Now I have to go take of my own. Thanx a bunch for a great ride. I am adding U as a fav.

WOW. I have to take a deep breath after that one. Great build-up. Great story. I don't usually read a story over 2 pages. I couldn't stop reading this one. Great job.

Didn't need to read past the first cliche filled page to realize this wasn't worth finishing. Don't bother on this one

Great story, fantastic build up and great plot Keep this one as one of your best

you have been here long enough to know better than to post a story without going through a good editor first. on the first page you change krissy's name to kim this STUPID goof ruins a story if you had proof read it and put it through a good editor first this would have been caught. get smart and delete this now and run through an editor then repost it and do it to all your stories

SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND A LOT OF RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND ALWAYS USE A GOOD EDITOR BEFORE POSTING

DBRS

Talk about hitting the right buttons. Massage leading to a hot anal coupling, realistic expressions of emotions during the build up, and the climax. Best new story, any category, in a very long time on this site. Well done!

anyone who did not get hot with this one is dead...great job...part 2 soon please

Unique, restrained, and sexy!

...and for the love of mike please get an editor

You had a nice build to the story and didn't begin thge sex too soon. Part of the sister's behavior and speech is a bit implausible and not realistic. There were also a few goofs which a good editor would have corrected. It was very good but it could have been even better. Keep writing and use an editor!

Learn the difference between lay, laid and laying. Too much rambling also. Not bad though.

I always look forward to contributions from you and am never disappointed.

I agree with the comment about lay, laid and laying, but, sadly, many others on this site also seem to have difficulties grasping the proper usage of these words.

Look forward to your next tale.

But in the end it was worth the trip.

A nice ending and the whole story was erotic.

Thanks for the read

I enjoyed the story very much. I liked the slow start building to the great moment and finishing strong. Keep up the great work and don't pay too much attention to these other ppl.

...but good all the same. Now my pussy is wet and I think I need to go play with my bottom ;))

mmmm definitely going to have my boyfriend play with my ass next time i see him :)

Very well written, read a lot of stories, this would be on of the best.

First of all I'm not sure why so many anonymous readers feel the need to be so critical (if not downright abusive), if they can do better, then bloody well do it.

Secondly, I like the premise of the story, the slow build up and the eroticism. I agree with the need for an editor and/or proofreader would help greatly in the long-run. I thought the first half was a little repetitive (Krissy being shocked and crying, trying to help her feel better etc).

Thought the story had a lot of potential.

Keep going

This is perfect. I read this genre somewhat regularly and I am often disappointed. Not so with this story. I think you got everything right. I could imagine the young siblings together, battling feelings. I could imagine their bodies (especially hers) and each revelation of their (her) physical, youthful beauty and each excruciating touch. I appreciated the playfulness of the dialogue and, of course, the seduction. The young sister being seductive but so coy and innocent at the same time. Obviously, so well telegraphed, too. You knew exactly where this was going and it went there. Exquisite. I'm a fan now. I intend to find more of your work; see if I detect a common thread.

I WANT TO TRY IT NOW!!!

Why the name changed from krissy to Kim ?

is not good writing

otherwise fine

I got very thrown off when the name of your female character changed. The writing is good, but the editing left a lot to be desired. Still, if you wrote a follow-up with these characters I would definitely read it.

I definitely got hard while reading this story. I came at the moment that he began pulling his sister's boxers down. Nice story.

Hoping for more to this story

love to see you make this in to a series!!!

Need a little proof reading. What happen to the bra. Micheal move his hand up to her neck and did not feel the bra. Then she has on a bra. Off comes the shirt and the bra remains. With any good back massage the bra would be unhooked for a total back rub. Krissy could let her bra cup her breasts as she lays tummy down OR remove the bra and place it with her shirt. An ERROR near the top of page 3, both are lying not sitting. Seaman is semen on page 4. Krissy is not Kim on page 3. All and all a good story.

LOVED IT. I couldn't stop picturing the massage, with me being the brother. Very erotic. I sure hope you'll post more.

And it stings! Great story!

Please note:

I re-submitted this story after correcting the editing errors pointed out by readers. Sorry I let those flaws slip by me, but they are corrected.

Thanks,

Addie Q

man this story is awesome .. thank u very very very very much :)

This has to be the best story i have read in ages I hope there is more to follow.

Thanks

Seriously, who talks like that. They did that on the "Leave It To Beaver" show in the late '50's. I can't believe that Michael was 20 and didn't know what sexual arousal feels like. He's a what, 20 year old virgin? Krissy played him like a piano. It took this guy so long to catch on and do something, I thought he was gay. Sorry folks, this is way to simple and silly.

This story was very hard to read through to the end. The dialogue was very repetitive and the characters seem completely unbelievable. Hard to imagine an 18 and 20 year old being so naive about sex. I also had a hard time understanding why she was so "scared". Overall the flow, direction, and pacing of this story just didn't make sense to me.

Just so you know, this story is absolutely fiction, and a fantasy from somewhere within the deepest parts of my psyche. I make no apologies if it seems un-realistic.

My goal was totally personal, to write a story that matched my own fetish and hidden desires. I don't try to rein in what I write, it writes itself.

Addie Q

Sometimes we, some of us anyway, still have in our heads the dialogue and cautious exploration of our first times. This brought those times back for me and made your story all the more enjoyable. Glad you shared your thoughts and longings.

Awesome story. I don't agree with any of the negative comments.

Addie Q, took the time to put his thoughts out in the open

for people to read, I have noticed that to many people think that they can do better.

To those people I say.......... SHOW US WHAT YOU GOT!!!!!

Ed

The negative comments don't really bother me. As I said before, I write these stories for myself. Me and me alone. I post them because people seem to like them, but mostly because I find that too much of the stories on-line aren't loving enough. I want to add some tender and kind erotic fiction.

Also, the first sentence of your post should read:

"Addie Q, took the time to put *HER* thoughts out in the open

for people to read..."

peace,

addie

thank you AddieQ for that nice storie .

hope we can have more stories from you .

thanks again .

sam & jojo

awesome. i just jacked off twice. CHARLIE GRISHAM IS AWESOME

delicious. Thank you.

This was a really great story. I enjoyed the love between them almost as much as the sex! Keep wiriting!!

i have now read 3 of ur stories and find them extremly stimulating...i love small breasts ,,,,,,some of ur stories would be great for a role play fun time....kkeep it up

Very well writin, perfect story....:)

this is the 1st story i have read of urs and look forward 2 reading more!

hot hot hot I always thought I did not like anal but with a girl like her oh yeah!!!! I would in a heartbeat

i got hard reading the first page and it only took about five seconds of jacking off to cum. great great story

It was really hot but too long

What's with this "bottom" nonsense? That's what children call it. Adults call it an ass.

your sister's a freak yo

Whilst I must reluctantly agree that you would be wise to make use of an editor's skills to improve the errors in continuity, your skill in conveying the tenderness of the brother in this delightful story cannot be in doubt.

I found it perhaps a little repetitive in places but the overall impression was wonderful. I adore small breasts and well-formed bottoms (yes, I think that word was wholly appropriate to the story) and from what little one can discern from the tantalising photo in your bio', it would appear likely that you offer both - ah, the mind wanders in delicious excitement at that thought .....

I shall read more of your contributions soon and if they contain anything like the love and tenderness of this tale, then I know I shall be in for a treat. Keep writing addieQ and pay no attention to the detractors, for although discouraged in my own first posts, I no longer let them get to me in my current writings on here. Let's face it - if they could write themselves, they would do so. xx

i'd prefer vaginal

Wow - thank you for something so wonderful!

One of my favorites for sure.

I'm still sort of in awe of all the critical and negative "reviews and critiques" that all these literary geniuses have lambasted you with. A simple reread of your stories before posting them will satisfy their rude dissatisfaction. As far as this story, as well as others you've written, is concerned, they are in no way "over written". In the "real world", the most delicious and memorable intimacies take time, familiarity, and trust, to evolve, develop, and become realities, and that the slow tantalizing build up, can be the most exqusitely exciting element of any such experience. I've "been there", and have "done that", and you seem to have an intimate understanding of what it takes to build to cresendo of pleasure. Lastly, I usually stay away from stories about men written by women, and/or stories about women written by men because of the inauthentic nature of what each gender truly feels and experiences, but you have a kind of insight that borders on uncanny, and delightful to read. Now, it's on to your other contributions, and damn the torpedoes!

OMG, that was great. I had sex with a cousin when we were 14 and at first it was awkward. We learned more about each other and the sex felt so much better each time.

she should rub her feet on his dick

Plausibility is always difficult but you made this work. This is one of the very few that I read every word and wished there were more. It also worked because I could easily imagine the physicality of these young sibling lovers. But the best part was your insistence to describe the intense emotions. It is beautiful. It is love.

my my..a wonderfull experience cumming while reading this piece of art.thanx buddy keep on the good work.

Oh my gosh.. That was the best climax I've ever had..

I've read quite a bit of stories lately, and I'm tellin ya, no storie is or will ever be better than this one. Think you could right more to this one, or another one?

Huh... i was intrigued, as others may get a sexual thrill from this. I simply just enjoy reading the strange and interesting. And this, sir was very unique in both.nice detailed descriptions btw!

Wooow

Their parents won't be home for two weeks! Give us a part 2!

First off.. I LOVE your stories! I haven't read too many of them but you come up with some good stuff! I want you to know that I like your material that way I don't come off as an asshat hater when I start complaining...

I've noticed in most of what I've read that you repeat things over and over and over, to the point where I almost get sick of reading and stop to find something else to read... only the fact that I know a condensed version of the story would actually be *great* (because I've read all of your things through) keeps me reading.

The conversations between the two keep saying the same things over and over, 5, 6, 7 time taking up pages when two or three paragraphs would have been filling. The same with the sex, pages and pages of repeated duplicated buildup...and... when we get to the actual penetration we only get NINE WORDS! Argh!! It killed me!

I don't even mind editing slips and such if the style was smoothed!

I know, I know, I'm going to get a bunch of anon readers that will crucify me and throw out the usual one-liner that we see everywhere.. but I'm more interested in watching your good stuff turn into *amazing* stuff!! ...and hey, I have a lot more of your writing to read, so maybe it already has and you've altered some of this, if so disregard me ;)

Please keep writing, your contributions ARE appreciated, and I look forward to reading the rest of your stuff! :)

I really enjoyed your story and I do agree with the previous comment about repeating yourself, but even with some minor errors, it was very good.

Didn't do a very good job, did he?

Nobody gets after the ass over pussy on the first go round though

I Once did this to my step brothers girlfriend ,I got Melanie's jeans and blue knickers off ,after massaging her tits and hairy cunt ,I fingerd her smelly musky fanny ,and shagged her ,

That was the greatest thing I've read in so long.. good job!

Wtf

Thank you a good story like most of yours!

That was perfect

Great story! Too bad we didn't know if it was an one time thing or something of regular.

Almost every story I have read has these idiots who think they are English experts and want to give you a critique even though you have said several times that you don't really care that you are writing for yourself and no one else. Can't you reading experts read that. So I think she is telling you she doesn't want an editor and she will write it exactly like she wants maybe even go F yourselves ! Nice story it got me hot for sure are you available :) ?

I'm sorry, but that was awful. You have way too much in there about how concerned you were, being surprise (almost disgusted) about her friend having anal sex. The repetition of "Oh God" in the beginning was distracting. You had multiple paragraphs that said the same thing as previous ones with slightly different wording. You started giving her a massage to help ease her emotions because she was freaked out about her friend having anal sex then all of the sudden you pants are down and your rubbing your dick against her ass. WTF! The story is disjointed.

Not sure what some people are looking for, but I thought the slow build up was perfect. You spun out the suspense perfectly, we could all guess what would happen, but you kept us waiting and the tension was great.

Please write another chapter, with their parents away, there's plenty of scope for a lot more to happen over the following days.

Thanks for a great story!

Honestly this is disgusting....YOUR SISTER????? I dont care if its just something made up. Its A HUGE turn-off. Like I have siblings and this is really turning my stomach. Please make it more realistic and outside the family. Thanks.

Damn my sister has a big ass an I wish she would let me shove my 8 inch dick in her ass an pussy Ill let her ride my face till she cums how can I get her to fuck

Whoever the fuck sas this isnt art is a G*d damn moron and should be lynched. This is a beautiful story and a wonderful show of love that doesnt seem to be big in the world right now. Maybe its taboo and maybe its unorthodox to fuck ur sister but I'll tell you what, if i had a sister willing and able, id fuck her till the cows came home and beyond.

Well, the editing definitely helped... But honestly, I knew by the end of the first paragraph, FIRST PARAGRAPH, exactly who the author was, lol. She *always* repeats the hell out of *everything* a dozen times, you just want to scream! ....and honestly, incest set aside (because Im perfectly fine with that part of it), these two need serious therapy, hell they'll never be normal. I dont even know where to begin,lol!

...a simple, brother I was crying because my girlfriend told me she let her boyfriend fuck her in the ass that way he can cum in her and she wont get pregnant, then she told me over and over how good it was and how hard it made her cum. Big brother, Im so jealous because I want that, the boyfriend who wants to fuck me, fuck my ass and make me cum so hard like that. But im crying because my bottoms so big and nobody will ever want me that way.

...w ww what brother? You love my bottom? Really? Would you help m mme? Pleaaase? Would you do that to me? Do that for me?

(Fucking ensues). Of course had he bothered to use fingers first things would have gone a lot easier. Going in without opening things up first is painful as fuck, oil or not. At least they used lots of oil in this story, im tired of the bullshit stories where the guy just uses some spit, or maybe a bit of pussy juice, like thats gonna work. Even if its slippery enough to get in itll be dry in moments and then theres tearing and bleeding.

...and then the brother didn't really even fuck her, mostly just held it in there. Really?! My horny, moaning, begging, oiled up sister is shoving her ass back on me desperately and I'm not going to work it for every inch I can and give her a good, back arching, toe curling, screaming body shuddering orgasm?

Sigh.

I do give full body massage to my cousin sister a year older than me (21 yrs) & she loves it but things never took this turn but still I am happy giving her happiness and pleasure and she loves and adoresbme a lot for that :-)

Really? Something more realistic, and outside the family? Dude, it's categorized under incest; hell, the title screams out (pun intended) "INCEST"!! If you don't like it, don't read. Simple as that.

I can't believe people enjoy having sex with their own fucking siblings!!! Sick freak!!!

I absolutely LOVE your work. Please don't listen to these insecure fools who can't get hard without thinking about a 20' dick piledriving a pair of massive fake tits.

If you cut out all the pointless repetitions of how much he wanted to help her, and how cute her bottom was, and how cute and vulnerable she was etc.etc.ad nauseam, this whole sorry mess would fit into three paragraphs.

Before editing this must have been a real mess. Improper verbs, pronouns and missing words for a start. I did enjoy her ass!

Great story man, you have talent for writing (even if it is porn)

To all of you who are keyboard warriors yelling about how sick it is to make love to your siblings, why are you in the clearly labeled incest section of this website? You are looking to stir troubler and deliberatly come here to abuse writers. Your worse then people who write porn.

(See what I did there in the title :P)

All of you "critics" are just cowards who hide on the internet and troll people, because you will never have the guts to tell someone how you feel to their face. I'm only anonymous because I don't have an account. Just calm the fuck down everyone. For the record, addieQ is braver then any of you because he/she put themselves out there.

I love this story, this story is the exact thing I've been fantasizing about for years, despite the fact that I don't even have a sister. Thank you so much for writing this amazing story, and please write more!

An ASS fuck story instead of a first time pussy fuck for a virgin???

The story was well written but it was very repeatative you focused on details but you didn't include new details I would have enjoyed a little more dialogue between the charaters.

I wish i had a sister i could fuck

I have never read a story so many times over and over! I honestly think this is the best I've ever read on this website!

They guys NEVER gets to cum in a pussy. there IS NO hole or place better to cum in for me than deep into a sweet pussy 1000:1 zero zilch nada over ANY other place to cum

This is the cutest fuckin thing I've ever read yo

Dear addieQ,

when I first read this I was immediately hooked. It had a far stronger effect on me than most other stories. I guess I'm telling you nothing new, but the naive innocence and mutual care of the characters makes it much more arousing than something immediately rough and explicit. While I find his empathy and her dependence a little hard to believe at times, the effect is still powerful. Their love for each other opens doors, as it serves to excuse everything they do without conscience getting in the way. I love how you build up the taboo and the expecation that it will be broken. The way you manoeuver the two of them little by little into the final situation is nicely long-winded. The "lower" section is a lovely tease. "I could lick her wet v*****" makes me ache to know whether or not he actually does so --I am more interested in the female front, but still happy to accept the premise that this is going to be a butt story.

Where I see a weakness is that the story's length has forced you to repeat certain words frequently ("vulnerable", "emotional"), so they begin to lose their force towards the end. But perhaps people vary with regard to how much repetition is too much --I think I'm more sensitive than average there. I also felt some of the expressions were a bit over the top. But then what you're writing about IS over the top, so why not ... And I felt a little bad for being excited by a woman's weakness and worry, because a lot of exploitation starts. But there's no denying it's incredibly sexy and that is my bottom line.

When I was asked to type in the security code (I initially meant to send a private message) and it said "you may also listen to a recording of the characters", my heart leapt for a moment, thinking that I would get to listen to an audio of your story :-D

I loved every Word. You managed to make the act melt into an all natural event. The love between big brother and little sister could handle such loving action.

Your slow build up was perfect and got to me totally

Easily the best and hottest story I've read in this site, and I'm not exaggerating. Admittedly I havent read too many stories (I'd say about a couple dozen, maybe a bit more) but this one certainly turned me on the most. I was actually gonna create an account just to comment here without being anonymous but then I kinda got lazy at creating a username, I've always sucked naming stuff, so I said screw it. Also, screw the people that just criticized the story for being "over the top", "unrealistic" or about the points of anal and incest (even though the latter is made obvoius by the title and category). And don't get me started on the grammar whores that get angry as soon as there is a single word that isn't used correctly. As if that was the top priority of the story or the site! This was as the author mentioned one of her fetishes that was written for her enjoyment, and by extent those who like it too. It wouldn't be surprising if the author gets aroused while writing and makes a couple of mistakes! This is a simple erotica story, and people seem to expect the quality of a professional novelist! C'mon, people read this to get turned on and probably get an orgasm or two out of it! It worked wonders for me, up to 3, almost 4 times in a row. I feel like some people just wanna troll because they're so frustrated with their lives that not even a hot story such as this works for them so they just go troll in the comments.

Ok, rant over, now onto the story itself. I guess the reasons I loved it so much is because it contains many of the things I like or have a fetish for. I frecuently fantasize about my younger sister, who I'm madly in love with, something I'm not ashamed of and I don't discard the possibility of it ever happening since we're very close, sometimes even intimate (over here where I live incest is still frowned upon socially, but it's legal if it's between consenting adults, so I'm not too concerned about that). After that, I also have a massage fetish, I just find it so erotic, especially when given by someone close at an intimate place. I also like it when in a story no one seduces or lusts after the other, but just some unexpected stuff happens, and one thing leads to another. Feels more natural that way. Here it does seem like it was a bit of a seduction on Crissy's part, but it didn't feel planned. It actually seemed like she barely acknowledged that she wanted it until she settled down in the massage, given her innocent attitude, and then gave herself into those feelings. I also liked how there wasn't the typical discussion between the siblings you find in incest stories about how "This is wrong" or "We can't do this". I'm saying this probably because of the aforementioned love I feel, but I think if two people want the same and they both acknowledge it, who the hell cares about whether they're related or not?! Life is about being happy, and if the person that you love and makes you happy is actually your sibling/parent/child/cousin/etc then I don't see how that should get in the way. In fact, you already have a stronger bond with that person and in most cases, have known them all your live, so that's actually extra points. But I'm getting too much into idealistic discussions so back to the story!

The slow burn that happens, as well as the bond between protective and caring big brother with innocent and emotionally frail little sister felt sooo good! Emotions are a huge part of erotica, just writing "My hot sis wanted cock so I fucked her hard, the end" wouldn't be appealing or arousing for a reason. Emotions flowing between the characters, the details of the scene and how it makes the characters feel and what leads them into their next move, the build up of how do they go from the beginning of a brother trying to ease and calm his shocked and insecure sister, slowly warming up with sexual tension and intimacy, leading to the mutual arousal and need of having each other, giving in to their sudden urges and in the end, realizing their true love for one another, it's all what makes it so great. I heard somewhere that sex is only about 10% physical and 90% emotional, and I agree with that. Just randomly wanting to stick a cock into some pussy or wanting to be filled up with one isn't the appeal. If the hottest random chick in the planet would show up at my house and tell me she's there to bang with me, I'd probably turn her down because she would be a stranger and I wouldn't have any feelings towards her. It wouldn't be the same as to lay with someone you know, love and deeply care about. The key difference is: Sex doesn't interest me; making love does. Making love isn't about feeling good, but about pleasing the other and trust that they'll please you in return. And that is what this story got so right. She needed it, he gave it to her, and she gave it back through the feel of her butthole squeezing him. Speaking of which, while anal isn't actually my fetish I still like it, and I like a small, cute and perky body, and I could picture the scene in my mind while I read, and it was amazing. I like to imagine that these stories are actually something that actually happened to someone in the world, and let me tell you: If that was the case, I'd be jealous of that guy, wishing such a moment would happen between me and my sister (even though her personality is massively different in comparison). So I guess I'm adding it to my fantasies!

The only thing I'm missing, and sadly I don't see it too often, is an epilogue. Not really a sequel (although I wouldn't complain if there was one) but just a time skip a few days or weeks, and seeing how did the events of the story change the siblings' relationship. Becoming secret lovers? Doing some more of these special massages from time to time? I'd be saddened if they just went on with their lives as if nothing ever happened though. I guess I'll just imagine that they became more that just siblings, without anyone ever finding out. On a side note, I wanna point out that this story actually is fairly old (heck I wasn't even legally adult when it originally published), yet people like myself still come here (pun intended), find this, read it and love it. That certainly deserves some credit. I'll definitely look at other of your creations, if they're half as good as this then I'd be in for a good read. I'm definitely keeping this one in my favorite pages folder though!

PS: I know it was a heck of a huge comment, but I like to be thorough with my comments, and then I get carried away and write full paragraphs all over the place, and I feel like it totally deserves it. I apologize in advance if it was too long a comment.

The writing was awful, repetitive, and just not how people speak