All Comments on 'My Hot Next Door Neighbor'

just stoooopit!!!!

ridiculous

MUST be a joke?

Was this written by a 3rd grader?

I didn't know that pre-teens were allowed on this site.

Stopped reading at FF tits and 14 inch cock

0/5

Sorry, couldn't get very far into this. If you're going to write anything (books, porn, short stories), please try and be a little more realistic. FF tits are possible but extremely unattractive to many. As for the guy... no.

Agree with all the previous comments. Also English isn't your native language the structure just doesn't flow. Learn how to convert Metric to English. Also learn to use articles.

Try again, this was just plain bad.

This person has never had sex and or in not much older than 15

Agree with all of the above... a bit of realism would have been nice... decent dialog would have been nice as well... sure the middle school boys love it though

I made it ten paragraphs before I realized the only cock I've ever seen that was 14" I saw in our barn when I was a kid. It belonged to a young bull we were raising. Our cow had a big udder too, but it was only one F not two.

Write a story that at least approaches real life, Ok?

Dude, get a life. That is the most pathetic writing I've ever seen. Porn movies have better dialogue and scripts.

Give up now and save yourself further embarrassment.

Few men have a 14 inch cock,and few women would want it.Silly story.

Worst dialogue of ANY story on this site. Awful story.

The largest penis on record is 13.5 inches erect, 9.3 flaccid. There was supposedly a 14 inches recorded in 1969 (lol) but it was never verified.

Oh, and FYI, the person holing that record, has been sans females companionship for the last 12 years. Seems the ladies are a might put off about putting out. :)

No heat, very little imagination, not plausible-14 in cock hmmmm.

you lost me with the 14 inches,,,, didn't read one word after that.

You must be a retard, did you even look at the vocabulary you used?

Oh, Lance, I have never seen one that big, it's even bigger than Jim's.

Pit-ti-full you should be banned from this site.

and so does tiffany!

The dialogue sounds like Dick and Jane 1stgrade reading books: unpolished and immature.

I have always wanted to meet someone like Tiffany and I don't know why peopel are so hard on the writer (I just noticed the pun there: hard on, get it? lol). It's just a straight up story about a good fuck. Maybe the commenters are jealous and they need to get laid, themselves. Well good luck I say.I liked the story. Thank you. And all the conmnenters hide behind Anonymous-are they scared to show who they really are?

Not bad from someone that could not even pass 4th grade english.

If this was written by anyone over the age of 10 it is no wonder this country is in such poor shape.

This is a joke right? You're making fun of other writers right? It couldn't possibly be a serious attempt at writing.

Even if it had been written by a 1st, 2nd, or 3rd grader wtf are you guys complainning about!? You guys want everything to be perfect but you shouldve known what to expect if your not spending money on short stories like these. Your acting as if you payed $30.00 to the writer and we know this isnt the case. So just shut the fuck up and move on with life. Thank you. Bunch of whinning bitches!

too short. could of played it out more. hope to read more of this story.

Bad dialogue

Lack of character descriptions beyond breast and penis size

Unrealistic boob and dick sizes

Surely, this was meant as.parody. FF breasts and 14 inch penis, has to be a joke. It was comically bad.

The big dicked asshole is Lance, the whore is Tiffany. What a sweet story.

vicky made it clear that she owned me her sex slave.. I had no choice but to a agree of else be used bu here aunt