All Comments on 'Grad School Mixer'

going to suggest canning the first stanza. Canning all suggestions.

O the inanity

of insanity

This is freakin' fun!

I left a score of 5, even though tempted to cheat.

just weird stuff! Fun.

Us gals who wear glasses also get passes :)

..is right. Good clean fun hoping to get messed up. I question some of the rational in the imagery but who am I? Very enjoyable.

the first three stanzas; the rest of it was a bit frayed at the seams. You have a really fun voice in your work.

This is the best of your 3 today, You share a characteristic with bogus. Like him there are elements that one could pick on and quibble about but I end up thinking WTF. V.

It's like you take one idea and relentlessly underline it.. Over and over and over with the most incongruent barrage of images left right and center and..

the paper never wears thin lol

Works great for me. Loved all three pieces you have just posted.

till the final lines. they seemed superfluous, the write ending more naturally (for me) back at 'just get in my way'. trouble is, i also liked the lines directly after that, their imagery, too... i just felt a natural ending to that piece where i pointed out. perhaps it's because it leaves on a more hopeful note than the negativity that follows, making it even more dynamic a write.

this could even lose 'open and give me a taste'?

C'mon . . . .

I'm a dirty snowball hurtling towards your mouth

Even if it takes seventy years

To make an impact

And all you gotta do is

Turn this way, look in my

Eyes, just

Get in my way.

blatha, cova me n latha, this is one dumb ass attempt at poetry