by D_Lynn
The beauty in this story was amazing. From the sadness, of what two seemingly lost lovers are destined to experience. To the discovery of what is important, vital, to maintaining and growing more in love. This story, though short, showed the possibilities that we all possess in keeping the flames of passion and desire burning.
The tenderness used to describe what is often felt as raw and bitter feelings that arise on the downside of a relationship were on my part, heartfelt. I could read this story a hundred times and never tire of the ending. Bravo!!
Full of love and tenderness. Congratulations on your hard work, creativity and imagination.
Excellent story. It is well written and says a lot about our very real need to examine our perspectives on relationships. Community is such an important part of humanity, and language can be such a barrier, but this story transcends that barrier in a very profound way.
I really like how the author balances all the elements of storytelling without getting wrapped up in too many details. The reader is allowed to draw inferences and conclusions, instead of being told how it is. I was left wanting to know more about the Island, it's people and culture, and it's future, but am happy to have visited.
Not usually my kind of read, but I loved every word. You were so descriptive. It really felt like I was there. Lovely story!
Thoroughly deserving of winning the contest. The story really makes a telling comment on what is important in a relationship. All of the modern trappings are stripped away and shown for what they really are, sideshows. All our couple had left was communication which they had to re learn from the islanders. Once there is proper two way communication then anything can happen
only one way for me to describe this story....Beautiful.
This story is a contest winner if I ever read one.
If it doesn't win the contest here at LIT, it has won it in my heart.
Thanks
Any reader who does not give a five for this sexy, loving story should thoroughly evaluate what is friggin' wrong with himself.
Thank you for your work in writing this story.
My only suggestion is to write about another couple's visit.
Awesome. This delicate subject was perfectly handled. I am so impressed.
Well written, beautifully paced, excellent story telling.
Thanks for sharing!
Wow - you have no idea how close to home this hits! I might even have to send it to my wife, providing she'll read it....
Thanks for an excellent look into just 1 of the problems many couples bring on themselves these days. Definitely food for thought. Would that Tehemeki were real....
...I want to go to this place. Even if I have to do it in my dreams. Please write more like this one; you have a new fan. All the best in the contest.
Oh! Such beauty, compassion, passion, and heart. What an exquisite tale of vulnerability, humanity, and healing. I am actually glad it took me all the long, busy day to finish reading it; it prolonged the experience. Thank you! Goodluck. :)
~Luna
I thought this to be very original and original. I liked it very much
Very talented piece of writing. Could stand by itself without the sex scenes and still be an excellent work. Thank you.
You should continue the story with the second trip to the island. Good job on getting first place in the contest. I agree with all of the comments concerning this story. You deserve a pat on theback for the hard work you put intothis story.
-A.
This is a wonderful story and you should continue it. I am a guy and it is refreshing to have a woman write stories from a woman's point of view. To me it brings more color and sensual feeling to a story then what a man can write. Even how a man can feel when he is in a woman is better written by a woman. I guess I am more of a romantic then most men. Please write more.
This is far better than most of the rubbish found on the NY Times best seller list.... I hope you continue the story with a second trip.
Truly a fabulous read. You truly deserved the win! Congratulations. Keep it up. A second story would be really nice.
Beautiful story told in a very warm manner. A sequel would be appreciated.
So well developed and well written. I only wish there were such a place.
The story was excellent :)
You should send this in to a publisher or some thing :)
i love the story and if u get more i will deff. read them i love it very good story u own the right to havefirst place all the way thanks for writeing such a great story
Hot and sweet at the same time. Very well written. I was transported to the island with them. Thank you for sharing this great story.
I can see why this story is so popular,
A thoroughly good read, a solid story.
The suspense, on becoming naked.
A beautifully written story! With a surprise ending (at least for me).
Very well done!!
it's been a long time since I've cried, but I was doing exactly that before you even mentioned tears in the story - you managed to not only cut through to so much of what is painfull and stifling about relationships, but also make it accesible with your prose
a well deserved award
In an effort to find words to describe what this story meant for me, let me just say - I am glad this story was told by a woman.
Thank you.
I have read a lot of stories on this site but this is one of the best so far. Beautifully written and sexy at the same time. I was transformed ito the life of this couple and didn't want it to end!! Thanks!!
I love your style. Your stories have such connection in them... It makes the (already incredible) sex just a bit.... More.
Yes it is a bit long, BUT!!! We all knew what the end would be like, & kept waiting for the turning point. The story line is so well written, the plot well constructed, makes the length acceptable.
Thank You for a very enjoyable read.
Favorited ...D. Lynn, you're just that...Thank you for a sweet story with a plausible scenario...many good wishes, my sentiments request on you
I loved the way this story wove love and lust in with the social dynamic that we have created for our selves. We are all so caught up in the almighty $$ that we forget how the simple things in life often can bring us the greatest joy.
Thank you for that reminder!
This story opens me up to my "new" lover - in ways I never knew possible! THANK YOU for writing this!! There are so many ways to communicate love!
Many words were left out of this masterpiece because they were injected in the mind of the reader by the context. The flow of lessons spilled out in perfect order on every page. Each challenge to the couple conveyed much more than the words on the page. It takes a very special person to write something as good as Tribal Unity.
Saying this is a good read would be a disservice to the author. It would only convey a small part of what should be said. I rate this as a perfect experience. The author made use of each situation to teach a lesson and didn't miss a single one. Thank you for taking the time to produce such a masterpiece. One can only hope that some lessons are learned and put into practice. A lot of love and care went in to this story. Outstanding job well done.
Your story made me feel like a winner of a once in a lifetime trip to a magical island where you can't help but come back a better person.
Thank you!
This was a thoroughly romantic and yet still very erotic story.
You transported me Lynn.
Totally enjoyable and warming.
XXX
What a wonderful story, really very insightful about marriages falling apart because of our inner doubts. Paradise lost and paradise found. Keep writing. 👍
What a beautiful story ❤️. I could see the island and the people in my mind's eye. You painted such a vivid picture with your words!
Such a fine story! Emotions all over the place, so real. I enjoyed it! Thank you.