by rocketgirl2011
I think you should continue writing. I'd like to read on and see what happens next. It's good so far
Odd place for a break, it so obvious that it was done for effect. But for the effect of who, the reader or you, I hazzard to say you. You are a wonderful writer you do not need the acknowledgment of anyone to move forward with your gift of storytelling. I hope you continue with your story.
Of course you should post the rest of this story. I'm sure that that you have already finished this story because of the way your characters are drawn, and the evidence of a dramatic arc unfolding. You're a tease, aren't you?
you should keep going! I just discovered your stories today and would hate to see this one go unfinished.
need the next chapter please. and only mistake i noticed was that he cut off her bra and panties but the story stated she wasnt wearing a bra.
of course u should keep going u big tease!!! talkin' 'bout "what do you think?" i think ur cold 4 leavin us like that & u should post another chapter ASAP!! I LOVE YOUR STORIES!
my hard-on and I vote unanymously to continue this story...preferably before it goes soft!
Are u crazy? I was working my clit like crazy looking forward to a good hard fucking and you leave me hanging? My name ain't Tiffany but I'm black, single female with a crazy fantasy to fuck a white guy ... please don't leave me hanging babe.
Loving it, I really like the fanasty of ravishing hot crazed man, taking her. I really want the next part, I hope you plan to post soon.
Great Job! :-)
I have had this particular fantasy for soooo long it's not funny. Then here you come with this story, leaving everybody hanging. If I was tickling my kitty like anonymous was I would have been so mad that I would have taken you off my favs list, not to be returned until you finnished this series(oh yeah, I'm demaning a series out of this one.) But since I wasn't... Carry on!
Yes, you know this is a great story. Then you just drop it just like that! Please continue with this story and soon!!!
You had a good start, I noticed one problem.
First you said Tiffany had no bra on and your stalker could see through the white shirt. Then in the bedroom you had him cut bra and shirt at the same time.
Let me guess you wrote this over a couple of days? Yes?
Small tip for you: crib notes for your characters...just the who, what, when, where and why for each one. So when you do come back to the story, you do not have the bra issue come up.
Other then that..good start.
Don't stop here keep on with other chapters or maybe a longer one.
Great start. You have a wonderfully vivid imagination that pervades your story. I look forward to your, and Tiffany's, next submission. Thank you for your efforts.
...when I realised this was the end. Please continue. I love this idea. It gets me so wet. This is my go to fantasy too.
lost my password for part two of this go to rocketgirl2011
Why not finish the story right here? Another title for this almost a story would be, "I'm gonna, but not now".
I guess this is great for those who love being suspended in mid air and left.
I'm not one of them, especially when I don't get a warning.
Ok, first let me say delightfully creapy. I imagin those who stalk don't think of themselves as stalkers..never really thought about that. But pease by all means finish I would love to know where this is going to go.
I thoroughly enjoyed this story. And that was even before the twist at the end!
Good writing!
THANK YOU SO MUCH 4 FINISHING ME, UM...I MEAN THIS STORY ;o) since i was looking 4 pt.2 i missed that u added on to this 1. still, this was good enough 2 cum back 2 & lucky me!!!!
Entertaining little twist at the end....a writer writing about a writer. Short and arousing.
Oh my goodness that was amazing. I was a little scared at first, but you ended it beautifully. My heart even took a dip when I read the last part.
Chopejem
OMG! This definitely should have been longer, that quickie has so much potential it is unreal!!!!
PLEASE,PLEASE, PLEASE,PLEASE,PLEASE! Think about it!
5+ stars!
Don't change a thing if they want more let them use their imagination. Loved it.
I really liked the story, but then that twist at the end??? I definitely didn’t see it coming! What a great way to turn it around. Can’t wait to read more of your writing.
((From a reader and a writer.))