All Comments on 'The Basement Room Ch. 01'

What a lovely tantalizing tease! I can't wait to hear about what all you do to her. Perhaps after you have plenty of fun with her you'll bring in a gentleman to share her with? Maybe he can spank the pair of you naughty schoolgirls?

The story is interesting but suffers from a lot of typos and run-on sentences. You would really benefit from a beta reader or proofreader.

I think this story shows promise and will be very exciting please post soon and don't forget she needs a bathroom near her little room.

Not many people are going to get past the first paragraph with that many errors. Please proofread or get a beta.

this is goood i want an update XD