Held me at the edge waiting for more as the story progressed.
With all the noise they were making I expected mom to come in and see them then tell them it was ok making a great ending.
This is one of the nicest written brother-sister incest single-stage short stories I've read in a long time. Well done, looking forward to reading much more of your work. 5 stars
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Anonymous01/16/12
Wonderful writing!
The writing in this story is really superior. Keep it up!
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Anonymous02/04/12
Fulfillment
Really captured the buildup of desire, and its final ravishing power and climax.
One of the best stories I have read!
My English is not enough to express what I felt while reading this magnificent story.
For a few moments, I closed my eyes and was David, loving Jenny more than anything in the world.
Can't wait for Ch.2. I'll read it as soon as I have time.
If I could, I would give it a 10!
Lovely, just lovely! ^.^ Well-written and nicely developed, likable characters, beautiful, sensual, poetic... Reminiscent of the author youbadboy, which is a huge compliment from me. There's a certain writing style I enjoy the most from others, and you possess it. Wonderful story. Can't wait to read more.
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Anonymous08/01/12
oooh yeah
god they seemed real people they were not eh? I would have fucked Jennifer too
... be the person making $700,000 a day with 50 Shades of Grey?
My sexual arousal dies a terrible death when confronted with horrible writing. Thus, I made it through only 11 pages of the book currently squatting offensively on the top of the NY Times bestseller list. Had the content been in your capable hands I expect I would be a fan.
You're incredibly talented. I didn't even finish this story before favoriting you.
Wow, this is awesome; this story has it all; slow-burn tension, sexual heat, a hot and satisfying fulfillment of desire, perfect! I also write on this site, my style favouring a narrative that encompasses the characters, rather than outlines them, and this story appeals to my personal aesthetic on so many levels - I only wish it were longer!
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Anonymous02/16/13
what next?
That depends . . is she on the pill If not . . . well that's another story.
This is a great story so please add some more. There is a lot of this story yet to be told.
First of yours I have read but it looks to me like you could become one of the greats here...
Keep up the good work...
English
Kept me at the edge, Great story
Held me at the edge waiting for more as the story progressed.
With all the noise they were making I expected mom to come in and see them then tell them it was ok making a great ending.
WOW!
Nothing short of amazing, keep up the great work
excellent
This is one of the nicest written brother-sister incest single-stage short stories I've read in a long time. Well done, looking forward to reading much more of your work. 5 stars
Wonderful writing!
The writing in this story is really superior. Keep it up!
Fulfillment
Really captured the buildup of desire, and its final ravishing power and climax.
PHEW!!!
Excellent writing skills.........incredible !!
...can I breathe now ? :-)
Thanks for a great story.
critic
absolutely well written ,more to come I hope
Superbly written
You are truly gifted at writing erotica. The reader feels as if they were the one receiving her gift.
brother-sister love
That reminded me of the times with my sister. Excellent read. I hope you do some more
Holy cow, Batman!
Articulate writing on Literotica. And good plot developement! What will they think of next? Btw: your story's pretty hot, too.
Lovely... Enticing!
One of the best stories I have read!
My English is not enough to express what I felt while reading this magnificent story.
For a few moments, I closed my eyes and was David, loving Jenny more than anything in the world.
Can't wait for Ch.2. I'll read it as soon as I have time.
If I could, I would give it a 10!
Exquisite...
Lovely, just lovely! ^.^ Well-written and nicely developed, likable characters, beautiful, sensual, poetic... Reminiscent of the author youbadboy, which is a huge compliment from me. There's a certain writing style I enjoy the most from others, and you possess it. Wonderful story. Can't wait to read more.
oooh yeah
god they seemed real people they were not eh? I would have fucked Jennifer too
Why can't someone with your talent...
... be the person making $700,000 a day with 50 Shades of Grey?
My sexual arousal dies a terrible death when confronted with horrible writing. Thus, I made it through only 11 pages of the book currently squatting offensively on the top of the NY Times bestseller list. Had the content been in your capable hands I expect I would be a fan.
You're incredibly talented. I didn't even finish this story before favoriting you.
Fantastic!
This is an amazing read and I thoroughly enjoyed it. Keep up the great work.
This is A grand title for a Love Story
This is Probably the Greatest Story of Real True Love of Young Love I've Ever Read
That was a great story. Thanks
WOW
Thats probably the best story ive ever read on here, nice job!!!!!
Hot, HOT story!
Wow, this is awesome; this story has it all; slow-burn tension, sexual heat, a hot and satisfying fulfillment of desire, perfect! I also write on this site, my style favouring a narrative that encompasses the characters, rather than outlines them, and this story appeals to my personal aesthetic on so many levels - I only wish it were longer!
what next?
That depends . . is she on the pill If not . . . well that's another story.
indeed
marvelous, truly a story i would suggest to any reader of romance
Awesome!
This story is a definite keeper... Hope there's more!
Incredibly erotic and beautiful!
I am sure Ch. 2 will be just as good if not better!
More PLEASE!!!
This is a great story so please add some more. There is a lot of this story yet to be told.
First of yours I have read but it looks to me like you could become one of the greats here...
Keep up the good work...
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