by Bethyboo
I scored this 4. I, for good or bad, have a mind for detail. This was inconsistent across parts. I will not elaborate as such would do you no favours. Except to say his strip is a positive. Nude Day got lost in it. In the stories h've read so far only 1 has managed to have ND central to plot!
The lack of attention to detail is appalling and the sheer unbelievability makes me think this was written by a kid from high school. Zero.
A lovely little story, which crams in quite a bit. Some very nice touches.
So enticing. Loved the continual reference to his need for that connection with his woman. Quite a romantic touch that really made this story more endearing.
I think he takes one look at the scene in the living room, gets embarrassed, turns around and walks out. Without any discussion you think anyone wants to have their fetish or fantasy played out amongst strangers? Don't think so. This just didn't work.
I wonder if he was so upset that he divorced the stupid bitch? It wouldn't surprise me.
Poorly done.