by Feotakahari
i find your story interestingly unique id like to see how this progress's if you so choose to continue this as a series.
This has got to be one of the best pieces Ive seen on literotica in a long time. While I think that this does make an utterly perfect ending, I still would like to see it continued. >_<
In one short page you have grabbed my attention. I'm going to play catch up now.
I absolutely adore this! I can't think of anything else to say, it's just so different and yet erotic. Ok, maybe the scarring is a little creepy, but it plays into the 'real damnation' aspect and is entirely redeemed by a love that's practically palpable.
The only thing I can suggest is, it's a little hard to visualise something like a person being lassoed by a tongue from across the room; some more detail on the more fantastic elements would be great. Aside from that, I've got nothing but praise.
I would love to see how this develops; if I could give it 6 stars out of 5, I would.
Thank you.