by BajanBelle
I like this story and the characters you have created. I really look forward to what happens. I do think that maybe you should have waited for Jhiordi's evaluation of Ali rather than describing her through her brother's look at her. It was just a bit icky the way he was observing her curves and her breasts and her pert butt and stuff. Definitely not the way a brother should observe their sister. I also still don't understand why they wouldn't be turning and going back to the airport where he scented her in the hopes she was still there. Especially if as Duncan said, things were so dangerous b/c he'd be hurt if they didn't find her. Why not go back to find her before she possibly gets on a plane.
I still am interested in what happened to the family all those months ago. I look forward to the next chapter.
and it would be helpful if your submissions were longer.
this is awesome..........looking up for more of this ............
not ANOTHER one! Why is it that the stories I really REALLY want to read I have to wait for!!! I HATE waiting!! Please more...now would be great! *hopeful grins* =^_^= PK
not ANOTHER one! Why is it that the stories I really REALLY want to read I have to wait for!!! I HATE waiting!! *sighs as her inner kitty gives a feral little growl* It isn't fair.. Please more...now would be great! *hopeful grins* =^_^= PK
I'VE LONG STARTED READING THE FIRST ONE AND NOW I GET THE NEXT PART ...AND NOW...I'LL HAVE TO WAIT AGAIN.
OH COME ON MAN, THE STORY IS ADDICTING AND I LOVE THE PART WHERE THE GIRL FELT THE CONNECTION. PLEASE....FOR MY SAKE AND OTHERS, MORE PAGES LONGER STORIES . PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I'd help you with the editing if that would assist you to get your chapters out more quickly. I am delighted to read a story set in the Caribbean that was written by a Caribbean writer. The only others that I've seen here are two set in Jamaica, and those reported holidays spent on the island. This has a genuinely richer feel to it, because of the intimate architectural and other details that you have been able to give, and even though I am Jamaican myself, I would be more than willing to help you to get this really going; indeed, it would be my honour.
this is interesting, really interesting. rewally hope to see this go far :)