by jimijarmushi
write more and make it lot longer.....it getting interestin now.....1c
I really like this story but theres just one thing. You REALLY need an editor. Which means a lot coming from me since it takes a lot of mistakes to make me ask for an editor. It's not just that you're misspelling things. You're leaving out words entirly or repeating them. Using the wrong tense and sometimes not making any sense at all. It's a great story but could be made a lot better by getting an editor.
You need to proof your work before submitting it.
Despite the spelling errors and typos, I didn't like this much.
Oh man! This is great. Please please please!!!!! Update soon.
Rocket into space would be a term too advanced for that time. Ni like the story though. It was sad that the Knight had to die.