All Comments on 'Visit of King and the Knights Ch. 03'

by jimijarmushi

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AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
dont wait long 4 another chapter

write more and make it lot longer.....it getting interestin now.....1c

GweallGweallover 12 years ago

I really like this story but theres just one thing. You REALLY need an editor. Which means a lot coming from me since it takes a lot of mistakes to make me ask for an editor. It's not just that you're misspelling things. You're leaving out words entirly or repeating them. Using the wrong tense and sometimes not making any sense at all. It's a great story but could be made a lot better by getting an editor.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Floppy like a dead fish

You need to proof your work before submitting it.

Despite the spelling errors and typos, I didn't like this much.

Weregurl93Weregurl93about 12 years ago
AWESOMENESS!!!!!!!!!!!!

Oh man! This is great. Please please please!!!!! Update soon.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
it would be nice if you used some proper English

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AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago

This was a very good story but it is just incomplete. Needs more..

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Rocket into space would be a term too advanced for that time. Ni like the story though. It was sad that the Knight had to die.

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