by BabieyBear
I think it's a good start. I'd like to see you describe the characters physically. I'm also having a hard time placing his age so if you could have him tell her how long he's been a vampire that'd be good. Sometimes his language is that of a young person and then other times he says something that makes hi sound older like 'my dear love..we'll be together'. I'd like for you to give us more info about the rules of being a vampire and what the council is about and just more details. Keep writing.
you have opened the door on what looks to be a really good series. I would love to know more about the characters and their backgrounds. I look forward to watching the chase and what might be shaping up into a battle w/the council.
It great but I wish the chapter were longer.
This story will make a good romance story Love it.
dont stop now it's good i was on the edge of my seat when she blacked out in ch.01 dont leave me hanging now
I really like this story, you have impressed me! I'll be waiting for more.