All Comments on 'Our Loving'

More lust than love.

I liked the first stanza, but the choice of crude words throughout the poem put me right off.

'As you stuff me full of your manly meat'

This line says it all - the image it evokes is of a butcher stuffing a turkey not two lovers in passionate love making.

Yes it is lustful more than love, personally I would change the end, but damn good nevertheless!!

awesome job