All Comments on 'Building A Love Life'

This is an interesting start, but a little short. Please mark each chapter Chp1, 2, 3 etc so that readers can choose whether to read or not.

thanks

good start like the characters thus far, got to love good old wives tales. looking forward to reading more from you.

"....and he lived happliy ever after."??

Great start, looking forward to more. Please smooth out the transitions, this one was much too abrupt.

Are you going to finish anything?

he rode off to the next jobsite. Who was that small dicked stranger?

but jobs do get finished. TK U MLJ LV NV

hope you'll post the content of the story sometime, and not just the initial part of the beginning

Seems like it is missing a few pages.

Try to get to a logical stop before ending.

Keep writing, I like your work!

I love your writing Please finish this one.

What was the point of this note?

WTF

What's stranger is there is no ch.2. That makes this tale meaningless.

No offense

Still unfinished, the author still posts here, wonder where this fragment of a story was going.

We can only assume that there was an error in the transfer of this story from your computer to literotica. So would you please resubmit the completed story? Thanks

I can see the promise in the little bit of this story that's written. But then it's just left hanging right at the start. Could you please finish this story, it's started off and grabbed my interest.

Please finish....there's so many stories left unfinished on here, please don't add this one to the list.

The only thing this story built was juvenile references to sizes of male genitalia. The title of this story had no logical link to this story as I perceived it. Perhaps this author started to write something and got sidetracked or the dog ate it. Who knows for sure. However, this wasn't even a story in my own definition. I can't say I liked or disliked the story because there is no basis to judge by logical definition as previously mentioned. Please take more care in submitting finished material in the future. Thanks for your effort.

I know it's a gimicky one pager and meant to be that way. Yet, the way you've written it, the story realy does beg for a longer treatment. I want to know more about this guy, his back-story and his future. I'd like to see how his relationship with Julie turns out and how he either overcomes or wins Tina. For that matter, I want to find how he deals with the liabilities of being so well endowed without turning to a stereotypical, "loose" lady.

Great set up for a story here. Don't know what happened to it. Maybe FTDS will go after it.

When was the start and what was the ending?

I mean... yes I understood that the story was starting maybe but it never came to any conclusion and NO way any thing close to romance... :(

I graded it high because it was a very god start - but it

LOL

...and we only got the first page. Real shame as I'm already hooked and want to know what happens next.

I'm obviously running in the wrong circles. No one has ever sexually molested me after seeing the size of my hands and feet... regardless of if I can back it up ;(

Honestly though, if a woman is picking you because of your Johnson you need to seriously think about double bagging your little friend before you let him out to play.

Was really, really................................

I just finished your epic "Boston to Birmingham" to find this one left dangling in the air.

the hell was this?

Is there supposed to be a story here?

what happened here Scotty

I know this is actually older, but I'm going through your stories alphabetically, and first I read 4 chapters of "Brother Love" with no conclusion, and now here's this one, a single page, over 4 years old, and then nothing.

What happened?

The real question is not "where is the rest of the story?", but how in the world did it get a 3.62 rating? I guess some people would rate a shit smear on a piece of toilet paper.

Is this a story or an introduction to one?

All this time and the fuck head hasn't resubmitted the story in its complete form?

It's my bet that he's built an everlasting love life between his hand and the dick that he was lying about and didn't want Tina to see.

A fool like you talking about using his hand to get satisfaction!! That's funny . But you of all people who doesn't even post a real name talking about someone who writes stories!! WTF!!!! You live in a fucking cave and stroke day and night because your wife fucked the fleet and won't fuck your useless dick! If you weren't so fucking sad you would be funny! gave this a 5 to offset your dumbass 1 vote we are sure you gave him!!

No idea what this was. Not a story anyway.

for effort and content and to offset the asshole of LIT's 1 vote

VOTE 1* FOR EVERY STORY RATED BY THAT FAT DUMB WHORE VASTIESMITH2 AKA BONNIETAYLOR2 AKA ANON!

I long to kneel and kiss the feet of Bonnie. She is a goddess and a one woman crusade against the psycho-mommy-boy-tantrum culture that is anon comments in loving wives.

She deserves your adoration not your puny contempt.

Kneel before her beauty as I do.

5* in honor of Bonnie. It is an honor to serve her though she asks for nothing.

That's not a story, that's not even an outline for a story.

That's not much more than the first page of a story that

would probably need to be five pages long to be any

good.

I've read most of qhml 1's stuff here and most of it is

really good. But, and I hate to say it, this one sucked.

Sorry. I really don't get it.

Yes I understand about the size thing, but where was it going. It reads to me like there is a page or more missing.

but as a stunt to promote the story later on, Good Job. TK U MLJ LV NV

What, you forgot how to write? You're a "One Chapter Wonder"? Just finish the story. You started out okay, but forgot to finish it or did life get in the way? It happens!

Any rating over 1.0 is exaggerating. I have read more interesting labels on soup cans.

Damn what a snooze I know u can write better

A different 'size' story that is just too short.

"6'2" tall and weighed 250 pounds... and there was no fat on me."

Okay... Bullshit.

Let's say the guy is 6% bodyfat. That would be a level of leanness that would make him appear to have "no fat" on him. That would put him at 235 of lean body mass. Unless the dude is a competitive bodybuilder with a needle hanging from his ass cheek, I call bullshit.

What happened to the rest of the story? I think you hit the submit button a bit too soon.

Sorry, but this gets a 1* for an unfinished story no matter how well written the (partial) story is.

where is the rest?

You're right, this is a different size story.

This is a tiny size story about at least 5,000 words too short!

If this is a deliberate ending, then it would appear that for a normally accomplished writer, qhml1 appears to have forgotten to take his normal medication for ending stories competently - better luck next time!

Not that I would consider what's there to be and ending. So, where's the rest of the story?

This is almost an incomplete sentence and totally out of character for this author.

Woodbgood

and the Q will put it thru and forward, TK U MLJ LV NV

Building a love life? How about building a story. I have liked every story ive read from this author but this one is just incomplete.

No ending here. Looked like a good start but 'what the hell'. If this was mistakenly posted it could have been continued with a chapter 2, 3, 4... If this was on purpose it deserves the low rating because it's only the beginning development and abruptly ends. I can't understand why it has any rating above a 1 star.

like everyone else

I enjoy your stories. Just clicked on this one and was immediately interested. Then I got down to the bottom of the page. WTF.

Where did the story go?

Just ended like a loud fart without a good shit at the end. Another 1* for an unfinished tale.

Where's the next chapter?

Where is the rest of Last and first page?

Story?

I'm sure you know this, but you can replace a story. Submit it again with the same title, and in the notes section, tell Laurel you're correcting formatting errors.

This assumes you can find the full story archived on you hard drive somewhere... If it's gone, then please delete this fractured story fragment. Your fans will thank you.

But all the 'drama' is in the comment area.

Where is the story?.

uh what?

over the years some of the best stories I've read were written by you. Then I'll see this story and think, "I don't remember this story. I must have missed it." So, I start to read it and it stops. Now I remember it and the reason I don't remember it. I never understood why you never finished it and if you didn't intend to why you would leave it in your collection of finished works. Thank you

Seriously!?! You get me all hot and bothered and leave me hanging! But seriously, if you’re not going to finish this story, take it down.

Was there a point? Just Reminiscing??

OK I give up, where is the rest of the story? Did Paul Harvey pass away before he shared it ?

Nice start but where is the rest of it!!

Does this story end like this????? If yes then this is the worst of all. Of course there will be no star.

They say there's a reason for every "thing", but this didn't even reach the "thing"..Not like Qhml-1

I think it's about the big hands, big dick myth. It's pure bullshit of course, but (There's always a but.) if you spread your fingers as wide apart as possible the distance between the tip of your little finger and the tip of your thumb is about the length of your erect penis. Similarly, on your inner arm, the length between the crease of your elbow and your wrist is your shoe size, roughly. Try it for yourself lol.

Where is the rest?.

Dude, that's utter nonsense. Not only does the story not go anywhere, but those measurements DO NOT line up. 8 1/2" hands are tiny for dude who's 6'2", look at the NFL combine measurements sometime.

Huh? Well. That was disappointing. On the the next. Love your stories…usually!

I think most of the story is missing

What the HELL? Where did the rest of the story go??

Move on people there is nothing here.::

Well, been waiting for ten years now. High time to give up, I’m afraid…

A short story without a story, hmm

That it wasn't one.

I read the story; I read the comments, I liked what there was. Loss of interest in continuing it? It's a good start to something...this isn't one of those 'February Sucks' kind of things where somebody has to do the rest , is it?

WTF???

This actually had a good start but it really faded fast. Some continuation??

The end is odd, out of place. Would be even if there was a next chapter. Definitely missing a lot of something.

And how come this is in the romance category? No romance to speak of.

Well that was terrible

Could be the start of a good story

well nice intro interwesting charators, now come on creat dam it pokes qhml1 with a leafy stick

Great start, but prick tease of a story.

"Where's the rest of it?", she said.

Too short and unsubstantial. Clumsy storyline.

Good start but ending made this a deplorable presentation.

The reason I gave it 3 stars was for the initial sup and as tip to the other fine stories I've read here.

What happened to the rest of the story??? Guess the writer got bored, or tired, or lost in the inches

The reason I scored this story so low is because of

It is no where complete. It seems there are pages missing

Is there a point to this nonsense?.It looks like the author started to write it,then forgot about it.

Pull this, and turn it into an actual story.

what happened to the rest of the story???

Been 11 years and you've written lots of great stories. Time to circle back and finish this one.

Decent intro, now where is the story?