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by tracewrites

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AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Pretty bad

'She wasn't going nowhere soon'

Neither was this story.

If you are going to write poor sentences like this you can forget about the reader following your story - they will be too busy laughing or crying.

Read over your story and you will see.

Read every day and your writing will improve.

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