All Comments on 'Hyo'

by BeastLover18

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ArieluArieluover 12 years ago
More please

I have. Thing for tall Asian guys. Nice to hear these type of stories.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago

Good start and I can't wait to read ch. 2

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
more more

that was good cant wait to read more from u

bredrebredreover 12 years ago
Fantastic

Love it. Please update soon

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Good start

Good start.. You could use a proof reader.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
feedback.

Continue. Thanks ; )

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
yay!!

go korea!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Meh,

Boring! And in need of some major proof-reading, with many sentences like "I quickly raised his head and looked at his father." Is this story in first person or third person?

NightpleasureNightpleasureover 12 years ago

lets see where this is going

jeff_djeff_dover 12 years ago
To the ones who are bored…

…it's called development. Try reading Pynchon. Or Eco. This guy isn't in the same class, yet, but effort counts. A copy editor would indeed be helpful.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago

it sounded like the friends snuck onto a plane and landed in the states without a passport or going thru customs. post 9-11 that would land all of them in prison and or sent back to korea in cuffs.

Imoto_chickImoto_chickabout 11 years ago
Please Please Please

continue!!!! Dont stop writing, this was a really good start and I cant wait to read more!!!!!

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