by coaster2
This story is still a wild card but so far , so good. The author is himself ' a wild card' in terms of my regard for his efforts, There have been pedestrian efforts - the ' action ' stories . On the other hand , ' Tipping Point', ' a House Divided' & ' Frankly My Dear' have given me MUCH enjoyment & food for thought.
I'll conclude by thanking the author & will be definitely following the installments of this story.
P. S. It's a positive sign the wife & husband are isubmitting to review by a impartial person. I hope the mental health professional is competent .
With your track record of almost all stories receiving ratings of over 4.5, you should write more. I'm looking forward to the next chapter and to your other themes. Thank you.
With your skill and ability to portray these situations that occur in real life and make them interesting I'd love to see more.
Her mood, her conduct, her attitude is most likely a result of his reluctance to be progressive in anything he does - he just goes along - monotonous, routine, non exciting and just goes...
I don't know your writing author and so I had a little hard time convincing myself to keep reading - it was BORING; however, the comments I read below suggest that this story might come to life...hopefully!
Looking forward to something...
leaves all in wonder when they surface unrestrained. TK U MLJ LV NV
Dark and depressing so far. Mental illness or just boredom?
Gave it top score cause it bothered me so much. Isn't that the epitome of why we read these stories? The emotional punch?
thing I can say so far is, for a first chapter building up so slow, it is to short.
why in hell should I read now chapter 2 ? to find out she is the fucktoy of the neighbour or that she has an early menopause and Dr. who gets on my nerve just wants to make money eventhough she knows or give her a hormon treatment that makes her behave like a 15 year old ???????
do I wanna read this? I mean it is so sexy and hot I almost fell asleep eventhough it were only 2 pages.
Slow beginning but pick up real nice. Thanks fo sharing and hurry with Ch.2.
C2,
About Walter and Natalie. If I'm the only one, so be it. I"M CURIOUS as to where this will go! Hooked on this? Absolutely. Take us where you will I'm in.
Thanks for sharing on Lit.
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It does sound like the situation of many couples but I am definitely interested in the details. It would be fascinating if he turned out to be the one with problems.
The business of going out on his own should really be discussed with his partner!
I like that the husband is growing a pair, and is starting to take the responsibility of being the head of the household, and not just a convenient helper to do the wife's bidding.
Probably something he should have done a few years back, instead of letting the situation get out of hand.
A good original storyline and I'm interested in whats going to happen.
Thanks for the good read.
This author has done some outstanding work. This is not one of them. If this follows his usual pattern of many chapters, I'm afraid he will soon lose my attention. So far, there has been no character development. We know virtually nothing about all the characters, except the latest doctor, and she acts like a jerk.
This whole first chapter could have been done in 500 words. It is like the author was being paid by the word. Why say things in ten words when he could use 200?
Other than satisfying my curiosity as to how it ends, there is nothing in this boring chapter that makes me want to read Chapter 2, whenever it comes out. Apparently, some readers like these serialized stories where a short chapter comes out now and again. I much prefer the story where the author has completed it before publishing and, if it is too long, it is published in successive days, not many days or weeks apart.
So far, this hardly rates a 2. Not this author's usual level of accomplishment.
I agreee with one of the commentators, this is going to be well worth staying with. Both Walter and Natalie have their problems, Walter shows his when he talks about his job. being passed over for promotion, getting hassled when he wants time off. he is quite the softie, and this shows in other peoples expectations of him. Natalie has been taking advantage of him so far but in the back of her mind wants him to stand up and be counted
and to make one with limited knowledge is disatrous. TK U MLJ LV NV
We've got the beginnings of a great story. Let's see where it goes...
cornhole rudely buggered, he smoked a meaty cock, betrayed!
Wonder why most cross-Atlantic writers use only the word "move" when motion of any kind is described? Couldn't the author use walk, promenade, saunter, slither, crawl, or another word, even for variety, than move? Just curious.
Are you writting a story or a gossip column. I will wait.
What the fuck is going on in this shit story... too much drama not enough fucking... Instead of loving-wives this shit should be in non-erotic bullshit category.
A very nice start. I'm glad to see they are seeing a female psychologist. My wife and I saw a slightly older male. In hindsight, he was smitten with my wife and was no help whatsoever.
I'm not sure who of the two is the silliest. Walter for being such a wimp or Natalie as a bitch ( sorry dogs ). 3 ***
there should be some type of euphoria for the parties. TK U MLJ LV NV
I can understand being reluctant to make a major work decision with his home life in flux.
I realize it was just a symptom of their larger problems, but the "leaky" faucet that only happens when she does the dishes? Maybe she just isn't turning it off tight enough!
but I do have the checkbook and if you want me to write more than one check you will watch your fucking mouth bitch.